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Anonymousabout 19 years agoNeeds a second draft.
Some small problems interfere with the story.
Josh goes to visit Jane Harper and halfway through their session, she becomes Beth Harper, inexplicably.
An organism is not an orgasm.
Other than that, a good concept.
Anonymousalmost 19 years agotypo city!!!
Too damn many typos.
What the hell, man?
Was your hand down your pants the entire time you were
typing this?
Anonymousover 11 years agoHello. I would like to tell you that your stories are really very entertaining and i would like you to continue writing more stories. Thanks
Anonymousover 7 years agoPoor spelling and missing words also strange text constructs
I like the concept but at times the missing, mis-spelt and wrong words make it hard work
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