All Comments on 'Swallow'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 20 years ago
Short and sweet

[I'm just giving it 75 because it obviously didn't involve the effort you put into your wonderful prizewinning story.] What a sweet and charming turn in the last line! The poem seemed ordinary as it began, but when it ended it made you go "Huh...."

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
All these years,

And only one comment?Shame. I read this and was blown away. Short and simply written, but packs an amazing punch! Swallow me so become I part of you. Those last two lines staggered me "So that when you look at another guy

You see him through my ecstasy". Damn.I won't be forgetting this one, ever. Well done!

CoryleaCoryleaover 15 years ago
A new way to see things

I never thought of swallowing a man's semen in quite this way before; making a part of him become a part of me seems unutterably intimate and amazingly romantic. Thanks for that shift in worldview; I like this way of looking at things.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Perfect

Some times people mistake length and clever twists, semantics as quality. This is clear, concise and direct.

Less is more. Perfect. After I read it, all I could say was damn.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
This is still....

One of the absolute best poems on here.

I come back to read it often.

Still gets me wet.

avrgblkgrlavrgblkgrlover 9 years ago
I had to revisit it....

It's still one of my most favorite poems.

AnonymousAnonymous9 months ago
The idea of his delicious cum becoming part of me forever is wonderful!

I happen to love swallowing my lovers delicious creamy cum! Just thinking of a part of him is within me all the time turns me on so much!

Orpheum69

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