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impo_58impo_58over 9 years ago
For now just a 1 *...

For now just a 1 *...I'll wait for the next parts, but the way showed here is more to become even worse...Let's hope not...

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Wow

Jacob is going to be in for a wild ride when Torie gets a hold of him. Poor John will find that Torie will never want a Yuengling beer and he will wonder why the well has dried up. Nice read.

KarenEKarenEover 9 years ago
No Score Yet

I going to wait and see, but I currently have ZERO respect for Torie.

She wants to be with another man, she should tell her husband, and leave.

swingerjoeswingerjoeover 9 years ago
Excellent debut!

I appreciate your writing style, as you do an excellent job of letting the readers know exactly what thoughts are taking place in the heads of the characters. One minor quibble is that you shifted tenses a few times, from past to present, and back again. Try to maintain one tense (past works best) throughout the story, or it can be confusing to read.

I look forward to the next chapter.

looking4itlooking4itover 9 years ago

KarenE hit it right on the head. She has the wherewithal to have stopped this before it even started but to allow herself to dwell means she is already and willing. I would not leave Jacob out of it either. It takes two to tango and most of the lives they are about to mess with have no clue and, even worse, no say. Pure selfishness.

patilliepatillieover 9 years ago
Good start

I love cheating wife stories, the emotions they evoke, and this could be the start of a good one.

Course, it all depends on how you complete it. Good luck and nice effort.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Why? Why is she considering cheating?

For the thrill? She doesn't seem to have much respect for either her husband or her marriage. And I question whether this is an interesting start or the whole story. No "Chapter One". No "to be continued". So if this is the beginning and the end, then it's a poor offering. We'll see. No stars at this point.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Of course, patillie is a two-bit slut.

Yeah, what this site needs is another cluck loving author.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
1*

A new baboon writes on Cuckerotica

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Why do all stories start off with the same premise?

Happily married wife suddenly falls for a guy that is a poor substitute for her husband and suddenly, she's having an affair without any guilt. Not even the slightest. How the fuck does that happen?

QuantifiedQuantifiedover 9 years agoAuthor
Thanks

... to all who have left comments. Even if you didn't like it, I'm grateful for the feedback! Everybody's gotta start somewhere.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago

Utter garbage, getting so tired of the trend on lit now, cheating wife with no reason for it other than she's a bored bitch with no respect for her husband, her marriage and lets face it HERSELF, I won't be reading any more from you, you're no different to ALL the other cuck writers on this site, grow a set and BE different.

chilleywilleychilleywilleyover 9 years ago
Good story I thought

As to starting to cheat, there are only so many reasons to cheat that one can have, and since LW is generally written by old men, the cheater is usually the wife, which narrows it down some more.

Really, originality is tough, so the readers might reasonably focus more on character development and plot than the structural things such as how did the cheater get found out.

Since Greek times, often the story needs a tragic moment where the audience says "NO you fool, don't do that!" In this story has author has the wife planning to cheat because Jason turns her on. That is the "no you fool" moment, but take that away, and there goes the story.

Chilley

Tootight1Tootight1over 9 years ago
loose story

personally I don't approve of cheating on either side of the fence. this story has a lot to develop before a judgment can be passed by me. there is no prelude, or a reason for anything.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
from my side of the desk

a number of affairs start in the same manner... the author (I hope) will develop into an above average presentation... I like...

horny_gurl55horny_gurl55about 8 years ago
lying

she is just another lying bitch

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
It's sad.....

It's sad that the author was scared off by these douche nozzles who spend their time putting down every story in the LW category. Actually I believe it's one sad lonely little man who thought he wanted his wife to sleep with others, and when she did she found out just how pathetic he was and left his scrawny worthless ass to jack off over Internet porn and try to feel superior by posting negative comments. What a complete and utter loser.

Tootight1Tootight1over 7 years ago
ok story

a nice set up for a story, but where is it going?

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
No good

This story is a waste of time without the follow up.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago

I lost brain cells reading this.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Torie will get caught

Torie will cry

Torie will try to "explain"

John won't buy her bullshit

Torie will beg for forgiveness

John will not give it too her

John will throw Torie out

Torie goes to her folks house

Torie tells he folks she and John are "having problems"

John gets a phone call from them

John tells them what Torie did

Torie's parents are not amused

Torie can stay there for a month, no more

John, in the meantime, files for divorce

John also files against Torie and John's employer

Torie will be dismissed

Torie will realize that Jacob cost her everything she held dear

Torie will blame Jacob for everything

Jacob will laugh at her

Torie will get a gun

Jacob will get shot

Jacob will live

John will correct that oversight

John has friends who play for keeps

Jacob is never seen again

Torie pleads with John

John refuses to listen after she tore out his heart

John gets a restraining order

Torie is crushed

John tells her to sign

Torie refuses

John again tells her to sign

Torie signs three months later

John stays in the house until the divorce is granted

Torie lives in a one room basement suite

John transfers to another city

Torie starts drinking when she finds out

John couldn't care less

John has moved on.

Torie cries herself to sleep every night.

John and Torie were once very happy.

John and Torie are not happy now.

Life goes on.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
Tactile Dysfunction

well you see the one star, that's the best you can do, i don't want to read any more of your stories, seems like all the writers can do is put the woman in the wrong. it's a proven fact that men and women cheat remember it takes two. you people need to get in touch with the real world. you write better and i will give you better marks

jtwheelsjtwheelsover 4 years ago
Planning on sex and already cheating

No

26thNC26thNCover 4 years ago
Cheating whore

Really hope John finds out and destroys them both.

NoBullAlNoBullAlabout 4 years ago
Good start and then????

If an author/writer (???) can’t finish their stories why do they bother at all?

tlevanssrtlevanssrover 2 years ago

So where is the next chapter?

WargamerWargameralmost 2 years ago

Cheating cunt, hope she gets hers, painful too

1/5

Mrhappy4aaMrhappy4aaabout 1 year ago

Start of a good BTB revenge story... I hate that some writers never complete their stories. This has the makings of one...

Just_WordsJust_Wordsabout 1 month ago

Good start and well written. Too bad it was never finished.

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