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All Comments on 'A Model's Compassion'
by StevenMonel400
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Anonymousover 9 years agoPresent Tense
Present tense narrative makes this story sound like a lousy bar joke.
Anonymousover 9 years agoNeeds editing.
This had so many problems with verb tense and grammar that I stopped reading it. I am not the grammar police but when it is so bad it distracts from the flow of the story it is a problem.
StevenMonel400over 9 years agoAuthorThanks for the comments
Honestly, I struggled with the verb tense when writing and editing it...
arrowglassover 9 years agoNICE story!
Not withstanding the grammar critique...still a nice sweet story!
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