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strictmaster12880SWBstrictmaster12880SWBover 9 years ago
Editing

If this continues, you need an editor. Good meat, but the bones need work.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
I loved this

It was very hot and sexy. Thanks for writing it.

sandymonroesandymonroeover 9 years ago

Totally missed the details. What a shame... There are good ideas in it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Great Outline

There is so much here.. it could be flushed out into something great. You have potential for a longer multi-chapter piece :)

Slow down and take your time. Develop your characters you could have a great following.

Keep writing.

georgekaplangeorgekaplanover 5 years ago
So hot

I love the absolute submission of Erica. The difference between her vanilla corporate life and her sexuality!

What a slut! Brilliant!

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I have enjoyed reading erotic literature for many years. My interests mostly run in the domination and submission genre. I have had several ideas for story lines that are more like fantasies that I want to put into words that keep popping into head. So I finally took the ti...