All Comments on 'Two Men and a Wife'

great set up for a 2nd chapter

This is a great story with a lot of possibilities. I hope Jake ends up being involved in the relationship somehow. How lucky for Allison if that ends up being the case! There are so many MMF stories on this site where the woman ends up being treated like an object and is just used for sex. I hope this story ends up being different.

Love open, honest relationships (I happen to have one) and strong women who are still feminine. This story so far features both. Bring on ch 2!

Finished himself off and resolved not to let her screw with him any longer. The end to a complete pile of unimaginative drivel.

Understand I wrote this about a year ago. I acknowlede your criticisms and would even agree lol. Im not sure which direction to take the story but I thought some people might like. So to those who read and enjoyed, thanks for taking the time to read it. To those who didnt, ditto! :D

But I can't believe you left us hanging! PLEASE write about how after dinner they "got comfortable with each other." Given that the hubby is on board, if that's what it would take for little brother to feel comfortable, I doubt he'd have a problem... Then continue with the 3 of them sucking and fucking and .... Oh my, I need to excuse myself for a few minutes...

Really hot. My favorite fantasy-idea is being banged by two men, one fucking me doggy-style and the other cramming his meat down my throat. They can even high-five each other over my back. Love love love the idea. Mm-Mmmmm.

The spelling and grammer were so bad I could not finish reading it.

Since "the spelling and 'grammer' were so bad I could not finish reading it", how exactly did you know the spelling was so bad?

Loves_music_loves_to, I'm right there with you. This was also a fantasy of mine. Idk when/if I'll finish it unfortunately, but I'll do my best to clean up the story, as well as continue. I haven't touched this story in 10 months lol. Maybe some suggestions from the comments will help me to decide a certain direction. We'll see what happens :)

I've had enough of all guys having "eight inches of hard steel". It's getting tedious.

Mixed up

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The comments so far indicate that your readers don't actually read what you've written. I never reached page 2 because on page 1 you mixed up the characters & their thoughts/actions so badly that it didn't make any sense.

Get an editor!

People wonder why I left Literotica in the first place. I guess I should have stayed away for good because the comments being sent to my email are just plain ridiculous. I wrote this story a year ago, hence the grammatical/punctuation errors. I dont plan on becoming a regular on Lit because Im tired of the anons sending these emails to my inbox. If you dont enjoy the story you can move on...taking it to my email is just something on another level. I write full time which leaves me no time to edit these stories that I've recently posted. If you all enjoy the stories, I'm glad I could share it with you. Only been back for one day and this . Well bye Lit! It's been fun. I'm out.

I am so sorry that there are a bunch of assholes leaving you nasty emails. Believe me I totally understand how you feel. If it helps I freakin love your stories. I know that people are gonna talk but I also know that you are only human. Keep your head up and continue to write. Even if it's not with this site. :)

Screw the nay sayers I love it please continue

Please continue your stories, there are many great people in this world that other people have put down or talked bad about, but they over came and became GREAT!!! which I think you are capable of becoming. I also think you have more fans than asshole's. And to all the people who have negative things to say, GET A LIFE!! seriously. No one gets paid to publish on this site. I for one have enjoyed everyone of your stories and have even purchased your work to show support as I have done with other author's on this site. IF YOU DON'T LIKE IT DON'T READ IT!!! simple. But please hun don't stop writing. Peace and Blessings !!! F2P

That little paragraph I wrote didn't mean that I would ever stop writing lol. On the contrary, writing is as much a part of me, as is art. Thank you for you support everyone, and for purchasing my work. Friend2pin, as you said, I don't get paid to publish here, and although I miss the interactions with you guys, it gets to the point where I ask myself, why put an effort into sharing my work here if people are going to go off on any little thing? It really gives me no incentive to upload any of my other stories onto the site. I'm not after popularity, which someone alluded to before. I just missed you guys and the site. But we'll see what happens. I have new stories which have never been published that I'm thinking of still sharing :). Thanks again for the support guys!! :D

I started with Arthur's second Chance before moving on to this. The character of the woman is much better outlined. The story drags me along and I was disappointed that you hadn't completed a second chapter.

Please do.

I hope you share more

I fucking love this story! I hope there will be more and if not I can only imagine!!!!! And I'm cool with that!!

I got wet reading this story and hope there’ll be a second part... :)