All Comments on 'There Must Be a Mistake Ch. 09'

Another great chapter to add to a remarkable story. Thank you for sharing.

i didnt like how the others DEMANDED someone else run things.between friends they could have just pointed out his faults and made a suggestion as to who should do it.still not liking grays treatment of del to much of the caveman do as i say now and no how about we try this or would do this with/for me

I like how you are putting all the previous groups together. Keep up the excellent work.

Chapter. Like the fact Grayson got Delicious to put a time limit on her Contract. and gave her a Harsh Punishment. and to see little Gordon getting ahead of everyone.

You are getting a bit repetitive with "I don't like you" "I really hate you" where it is really not appropriate.

a little lesss bickering would be appreciated, show that they are growing instead of the same thing year in year out. Over all very compelling.

DAMSEL Approved

Hi, Many of you have asked, "What has happened to Chapter 1, I wanted to read, or re-read it, but it isn't there." You are correct. Literotica took it down. They said there was "Inappropriate Sexual activity by a Female under the age of 18" in Chapter 1. I contacted them and said, "There was 'No Sexual Activity in Chapter One, at All, " Please review your decision and place the story back on top of my list." They are in the process of reviewing it now, and it should be available for your reading pleasure within 5 to 7 days. Bob

The dialogue gets a bit too much sometimes....can we have a bit of normal conversations between the characters without the constant riposte between them.

I was checking this site 2 and 3 times a day, every day, looking for this new chapter. In case you didn't notice it, it did not follow your usual weekly (approximately) cycle.

This is cruel and unusual punishment . Please be more considerate of us older folk.

Anyway, just wanted to say how much I love this series.

For those of you who complain about the back and forth among the couples and friends...if you look at the various types of working relationships there is one that used to be called conflicted. These folks thrive on the give and take of the kind that is in this story an for those couples it really and truly works.

Let me first say that the people who are complaining about the bickering between the characters in this story really have it wrong. Have you seen any of the sitcoms that have been produced on television for the last few years? Even the Cramdens and the Ricardos/Mertzes bickered. I find that banter between husband and wife to keep our minds fresh, especially as we continue to get older. There is nothing wrong with playful joshing as long as both sides agree not to get angry--and there is always time for intimate discussion later on if something does cross the line.

I like where this story is going. I'm just wondering how many people are going to be on that ship when it is finally ready to go. The cast of characters is already very large and almost unwieldy--but, again, I guess I'm just nitpicking because I am too lazy to read some of your other series so that I can learn more about each character's background.

Anyway, I grew up reading Robert A. Heinlein ("Stranger in a Strange Land" when I was in sixth grade and very impressionable and naïve). If you haven't read some of his later novels ("Time Enough for Love" and "The Number of the Beast" especially) I must say that where this series is going reminds me a lot of that. And his characters bickered, too. But they came together when they needed to and the universes were better for it.

Wasn't she Dale Arden in the Flash Gordon serials, but I could be wrong? Gray getting the Ming the Merciless jacket is priceless.

Sorry, I've rambled on long enough--you probably get tired of my comments at the end of every chapter. But I love these stories and want to continue reading them for as long as you continue to write them. Take care and have a great afternoon.

Roger.

Hi, I wish you weren't Anonymous, Roger. Your comment was priceless. I can tell you are in my age group(70), because I grew up with the Cramden's and the Mertz's. Some young people call it arguing, others fighting; I call it communicating. It doesn't matter who, when, where, why, or how, as long as you get your point across, and you go to bed at night, no longer upset, and are happy with each other. I have a "Tag Line" I use very often in this story, and 1 (ONE) yes, only 1 of my readers has a problem with it. " I think I don't Like You, and variation of the same.' He wants me to stop using it because he thinks it is Trite. I have to disagree vehemently. Many established, well known authors use the same tactic including: Patterson, Ludlum and Cornwell. I do not like using four letter words to express indignation. The only four letter word I use regularly in my stories is 'LOVE.' You are correct it is Dale Arden, it was a typo. You mentioned Gray and "Ming the Merciless. You didn't mention 'FLASH' Gordon. Without him there would be no Ming. Please keep writing I loved your comment, Anonymous or Roger. Bob

I know you took some liberties with some scientific information, and it doesn't detract at all from my complete enjoyment of this series. But, just know that there is no such thing as negative 77 degrees Kelvin. 0 K is absolute zero, the point at which all atomic motion stops, and therefore there can never be a negative anything on the Kelvin scale. That being said, I can't wait for Chapter 10.

i know this will no be the last chapter because each chapter gets better and funnier keep those chapters coming please

The entertainment value, humour and ongoing verbal sparring has made your story (or should I say series) one of the very best.

I do have one issue however. The verbal sparing up to now has been in good humour and not malicious. But Gray is clearly a dogmatic and predatory character who will not compromise. Delicious is a strong willed young lady who will work with, but not be dominated by anyone. She is not a submissive. Their relationship can not survive.

Please keep up the great work.

I think your story line is pretty good. The science, if not completely factual, is believable, and you are good at simplifying it for your audience. On the other hand, there are a seemingly endless number of typographical and grammatical errors. I have managed to overlook a serious number of those. However, the reference on Chapter 9, page 2 as to "Life, Liberty, and the Pursuit of Happiness" cannot be so easily dismissed. Nowhere in the Constitution of the United States of America can that phrase be found, as it is a part of the Declaration of Independence. There are a few other similar references that are erroneous thus far, but I do not believe most readers would easily catch them. Nevertheless, to disseminate such a preponderant misconception is akin to perpetuating misinformation; and it is contradictory to the premises embodied by your cast of characters. You could benefit from a thorough editor.

The grammar mistakes and typos continue unabated. It was enjoyable but you keep adding more and more characters who seem to share the same argumentative smart-ass personalities. Even in sexual matters, the women hit when upset, act out, and need to be spanked. Smart people don't need to use the same smart-ass, swearing language to be understood.

"Dr. Grayson Thyme and I will be working side by side with me..."

If anything, the language, the grammar and the mistakes are all getting worse!

I'm sure most of us will all hang in there, just to see what happens, but the thought that anyone could ever have shown interest in publishing this mess becomes more laughable with each new installment.

I find it amazing that the people that always slam an author do so anonymously.

I do agree hat this series does need some serious editing BUT, I find it highly entertaining in spite of the errors. Typos happen, I have caught them in several book by well known authors edited by professional editors. They are minor and on occasion have been funny but nobdy is perfect and these anonymous critics expect perfection. How about they try writing a series or two......

Tesla's given name was Nikola, not Nicholas. This is just one more example of an error that could have been caught if even a small amount of effort had been put into editing this story. I've had enough. I won't be reading any more of this story (or any more of this author's work, for that matter), and I regret the time I've invested in it.

If been reading this for 8 hours straight. Like all great stories I love I just can't stop, never give up writing coz you have a great gift and it should be shared with all, ps if you get published I'm buying your books 😄

Correct me if I'm wrong, but the $100s beneath the Jar should have went to Even. The bet between him and Delicious said he'll be a rich man at this time.

All this time I knew he was going to win this, there's a trick to the bet, he's a Billionaire after all, and that's not likely to change. So why didn't he win?

Nice story so far:

However, a science quirk found.

To get to Alpha Centari:

About 4.4 years at the speed of light

About 4.8 years at 90% the speed of light

About 8.8 years at 50% the speed of light

or

A million years at 3,000 miles/hour

The speed of light is VERY slow in relation to the universe, which is why technologies not directly related to the speed of light are required. An example of such tech is quantum entanglement and its instantaneous observations. QE is either not related to the top, bottom, or either in terms of speed (meters/second). UNDEF/1 = 1/UNDEF = UNDEF/UNDEF. Unrelated means no causal association. Therefore if a vehicle is within a bubble that is unrelated to the universe except at one point, then it might be a simple as taking a first step to travel interstellar routes.

Meters/Second also represents Space/Time. So QE is either not related to space, or not related to time, or not related to either space nor time.

Perhaps re-devise the engines to relate to this scenario so that if interstellar travel is the goal, it is feasible, where speed is not a factor; but there are other limiting constraints you can devise.

the idea of traveling through the solar system at near the speed of light is laughable. space is not empty it has dust and gas not to mention larger particles. collision with a piece of debris a fraction of the size of a grain of sand at near the speed of light would be the equivalent of a small scale nuclear explosion. the effects of microscopic dust and gas would cause serious heating effects in addition to radiation caused by the collision of atomic nuclei at near light speed. a lot like standing in the middle of the large Hadron Collider while it is operating. you would need massive shielding to prevent the crew from getting fried by radiation or the ship destroyed by Micro particle collisions.

I started treading this story before I read any of Prolonged_Debut10`s other stories. Now she is bringing in characters in from all of her previous stories and making them major characters. Now I have barely a clue what is going.

I made a living with a touring bar band for many years. That is a totally different kind of family--no blood ties--no marrige ties--only a music tie.

And there is always someone that you are always butting heads with.

The "lighting" man and I learned how to handle it.

We kept a running count in our heads. The statement was "explative of your choice", ours started with an F and was four letters long. F--- you! I mean it this time, not like the last ______ times. When he left the band, my count was over 500 and his was around 400. But the thing was, after it was said, all accounts were cleared out and we were back to zero.

When you are touring 3 to 4 months in a row, and home for one or two weeks in which you are playing your "home" bars, you have to be able to say something that clears the air.

That worked for the two of us, even after arguing for over 5 minutes over something dumb.

So for me, keep the bickering coming, It worked for Lucy, All in the Family, and many others. And everyone laughed at them. You still furnish at least two "rib ticklers" in every story posted.

One upsmanship between some of the characters is funny, but when EVERYONE (except Gordon) does, it it gets annoying, even pathetic. Can't you dream up any other personality type? I still love the story/ plot.

To build on the comment of another recent anonymous, the travel time to alpha Centauri would be about 4.9 years at 0.9c. In the ship frame of reference there is time dilation, with a factor of sqrt(1-(v**2 / c**2)). At v=0.9c that is about 0.44 times the objective (earth) reference, so on board the star ship the passengers would experience only about 2.3 years passing.

WRT temperatures, in a previous chapter you referred to minus 400C. Nuh uh. Absolute zero (lowest possible temperature) is minus 273.15C. Liquid nitrogen boils at 77K (kelvin = degrees above absolute zero). In this chapter you refer to minus 77K. Again not possible. At abs zero thermal energy of anything is zero and you can't go below that.

Other than these and some other quibbles, I am enjoying this quite a bit.

I can,t read any more .I t had potential but now it filled with drivel. The characters, who are supposed to be the worlds most intelligent scientists act like three year olds. It seems like your padding the story with rubbish dialogue.

.......this chapter was just too confusing.

So many new characters, all talking at once, arguing, joking, being sarcastic, etc and with sometimes 3 or 4 people in the conversation it was just impossible to follow. I know it's too late now, but if you do this you need to start each line of dialogue with the characters initials so we can follow the the thread.

As it is, I've no idea who said what to who, or who agreed or disagreed. In fact the last meeting in NY was for me a complete waste of time. I'm none the wiser and if anything even more confused. I'm just hoping it becomes clearer in later chapters.

Rapier875

I tried to hang in there, but all of the stupid bickering makes whole novel 4X as long as it should be.

Good bye. I'm out of here until your characters grow up.

5 stars

Sorry, it just became totally incomprehensible, who the hell were these people with a back story totally hidden from me? That and the utter tedium of the not liking and the killing threats spoilt what was basically very entertaining

And as for the lack of even the most basic editing..........

Continual assinine verbal one-upsmanship, unrealistic threats, incorrect word usage have made this story intolerable for me and I cannot continue. I hesitate to read anything else you have written.

To all who are bellyaching about the new characters, all characters in this chapter are in Fun with Dycke and Payne and Honor thy Father and Mother. The author has seamlessly incorporated them into There Must Be a Mistake. The individual talents of the new characters, Harold, Callie, Dycke, Payne, Stephano, and Patty, and their kids will soon be made evident, that is, if you can disregard the inane bickering and juvenile actions. I do believe the three stooges are the author's heroes. Because of the amount of glaring misuse of words and omitted words, I have often wondered if the author slurs or has a speech impediment while using a speech to text program to write his stories.

i know this is sci fi but its a bit ..... when people talk of negative kelvin. Maybe you will start manipulating plancks constant like in asimovs novel

Please learn the difference between mother-in-law and step mother!

As a reader, I can see why you've had problems getting this published. To catch up, you have to have read all of the authors past stories which means it can't stand on its own. I also agree with the others that it keeps jumping around and doesn't make much sense. I'm interested in the main story, but don't really think it's in the slightest bit realistic, especially given the current political climate.

I hear and recognise the criticisms but still keep reading as there's a damn good yarn here.

If this is science and is discussion between scientists why aren't all the units in the story in metric units -kgs, metres, km/hr etc? After all NASA knows what happens when you mix Imperial units and metric units. You smack into Mars instead of orbiting it.

I want these characters in my life!!! They seem to be so fun. There drive me crazy but it would be a hilarious ride.

I skipped the last four pages. All these crossover characters with in jokes turned the flow of the narrative to gibberish.

I agree about the use of non-metric measures by scientists, that was too implausible. As was the reference to -77° kelvin; at zero kelvin all molecular movement ceases. How can molecules get any more static than that?

The story line is (or was) interesting still, but the writing seems stilted; the characters don't (or do not) use contractions in conversation the way real people do, even scientists. In fact, the whole storyline reminds me of EE Doc Smith's Skylark series from way back in 1928. Two improbably brilliant rich men married to the most beautiful and talented women invent a novel space propulsion technology.

I'm moving on to the next chapter, but I'm afraid if it follows the pattern of this one, I'm out.

Do you have a story or just a stream of consciousness?

I liked the tale up to this chapter and now it makes no sense at all.

Got bored with all the crap repartee and too streched out story line. Lot of crap

I have to agree that the rapid repartee is getting out of hand and taking over the story. Without it this chapter could have been a third shorter.

this is a good story not great needs some serious editing as you are constantly confusing your with you're the first is ownership while the second is a contraction of you are. Also the introduction of characters from your other books is confusing are these supposed to be more hyper-intelligent scientists or are they captains of industry you're making an assumption that people have read your other books. I got lost in the repartee and just started skipping

You definitely need a human editor as the word choice is wrong quite often for homonyms I have refused to rate a star to any of these stories as the gross errors won't allow me in my mind to give you 5* but you have a great idea just need some help with execution.