All Comments on 'Babydoll Ch. 01'

Although all these stories including this one are based on improbable premise of---sister walking around naked or in panties....but this one is a good job at that

A very sexy incest story after a long time. Something similar happened to me too.

This story is not improbable at all. It happens every day and I wish it could happen to me----again.

There is nothing like a brother fucking his sister. I do so love my brother!

To me it sounds like a ten year old wrote this

That was a great story. To tell you how I would replace Ashley with my sister, I would start by telling you my 17 and11 month old sister is a brunette with long hair. She is a tan women with a gorgeous face and brown eyes. She has legs longer than the Mississippi river and a perfectly rounded bubble but. Her only falt (to some) is her small titties. They are round but only a B cup size. THEN comes her perfectly shaved smooth pussy that I have only had a few glances of but fantisise about every night. That is my sister.

is the worst sentence i have ever read

Thank You to the 11 people who have favorited this story. It was the first story I authored on this site and it has flaws. I understand it isn't perfect and is a little short, but I think it gets the job done in introducing the dynamics of the story. It may not be some people's cup of tea, but apparently others have found interest in it and for that I am humbly appreciative

Not sure how much I liked it. It was written....okay. I just don't think I liked how it seemed forced instead of consensual; it almost changes what category it should be in. I'll read on to see if things change, though.

Awesome story, but personally i think you should have built up the story a bit more before you started the sex.

4 out of 5

"" When I arose, Ashley was laying on the couch, in the living room, watching cartoons. She can be immature like that, but that really doesn't bother me. ""

@@@ hey, Im in my 40's and still watch cartoons every morning! @@@

"" I got down in the floor and tried to grab the remote, but she was too quick. I got aggressive, because I wanted the damned remote. I demanded "Come on let me have it." ""

@@@ who are you kidding? Lets be honest, you dont five a fuck about watchibg tv, you just want to lay your hands and your woodie on lil sis! @@@

"" I entered and sat down across from her. Then I asked, "Ashley you have such beautiful hair can I brush it." ""

@@@ he wants to brush my hair for me, out of nowhere,at nine in the morning? He is soooo perving on me, or he wants something, or both! @@@

"" Ashley responded, "Thank you Jimmy. I'm going to go take a bath." ""

@@@ who takes a bath in the morning? Ooh, she just wants to play with herself! @@@

"" I really didn't want this moment to go by, "Ashley let me wash your hair. I'd love to do it. I'll do a really good job. I bet it will really smell great once it's washed." ""

@@@ oh gawd! He IS perving on me!! This could be fun! @@&

"""Jimmy turn your head while I change my panties." I turned my head for a second, but only to get her to take them off. Then I turned it back to see her in all of her splendor. She noticed and whined, "JIIMMMYYY."

I was truly in awe, "Man, Ashley, You are so beautiful. Please just stand there for a second and let me look at you." ""

@@@ didn't think to mention it earlier, but THIS is how a brother would REALLY act!! Finally an author getting it right, not writing in the guy as some pussy-assed, whiny loser who runs around saying 'but we can't, your my sister!' And crap like that! Lol. @@@

"" At first she didn't take them off, but I remained patient. " Come on Baby. I just want a quick look." I finally placed my hands on each side of her waist and slowly rolled them down. She didn't say a word as I slowly rubbed her firm ass. It felt so great to feel her naked beauty next to me. ""

@@@ now THATS an open minded lil sister, lol! Maybe she trusts brother a bit too much, hehehe ;) @@@

""I leaned on my elbow and coaxed, "Come on honey let me stick it in."

@@@ wow, no pretense at all, lol!! @@@

"No Way" she protested.

I fussed, "Why not? Just for a second. I just want to feel it for a second..."

@@@ just for a second, hahahaha! Riiiiight!! He'd only last that long! @@@

She stammered, "It just wouldn't be right. I want to wait. I've never done it before. I want to wait."

@@@ she wants to wait for a real man with a big dick who can rock her world for hours and lick her pussy for a long time first!! @@@

"" I persisted, "I Love you Babydoll. I've always loved you. Will you be my girlfriend? I only want to be with you. You are the most beautiful girl in the world."

Ashley responded, "I love you too Jimmy, but we just can't."""

@@@ its like a bad soap opera, lol! 'But I Looooooooove you baby! That makes all the difference when I say that!! Haha! @@&

"" I didn't want to stop, so I thought about a way to keep things going. I slithered down between her legs and kissed her pussy and then started licking the fine downy hairs. She really started squirming around my face. Her legs were holding my head like a vice. She must have had one hell of an orgasm, because she really started breathing heavily and tremoring. ""

@@@ now hes getting smart!@@@

"" She pleaded with me not to do it, but I was in another world by then. Lust devoured all of my inhibitions. Her sultry pussy felt so unfuckingbelievably fantastic that the sensations drove me over the top. I grabbed ahold of her sides and thrust forward. My manhood was now bathed in the molten juices of her womb. ""

@@@ im thinking he had no inhibitions to begin with.@@@

"" She started grunting, groaning, and thrashing about as I slowly pumped in and out of her. Ashley pleaded with me, "Get it out! Get it out!" But she had the steely phallus locked in like a bitch in heat. ""

@@@ "locked in like a bitch in heat?" Thats about cheesy, lol! @@@

"" She involuntarily milked my love tool until I couldn't take the electrifying sensation anymore. My cock was twitching as I finally managed to release it a millisecond before I came all over her belly.

"Oh Ashley. So good, Oh God, Oh God, Oh God," I said as I gasped for air, trying to catch my breath. I kissed her on the forehead. "I love you so much," I continued to cuddle with her. Now you belong to me - you are my girlfriend." ""

@@@ Sooo, he rapes her, lasts less than three minutes, thinks its the best thing in the world and now suddenly thinks he owns her. Pretty sad-assed fucking pathetic! @@@

Pioneer State High School Is The Worst Fucking School Ever

Written as though the boy and girl were pre- or early teens.

Bad jimmy

As you stated in the beginning that this was taboo and a work of mon fiction. If people don't like them kind of stories they can always find others to read. Chapter 1 was a very good start to what I think is going to be a great book.

Stop! Don't.....Stop! Don't!

Stop....Don't stop...don't stop....ahhh.

160lbs for a woman at 5'7" is not wiry she is at least 25lbs overweight. Good grief you must be a guy to think that and not very good judge of weight to height for a woman. 160lbs is way to heavy and by the time she is a few years older will probably weigh well over 200lbs.

It says Jim is 160 pounds, not Ashley. Go look. This is crazy.