All Comments on 'Voice Activated Ch. 01'

Waiting for a sequel.

Love a good mind control story and this is one .Hope you are going to do more with it ;Keep writing and I'll keep reading .Thanks

5 stars and favorited author. I love your stories very much. Keep up the good work please:D

Can't wait for more!

But too much happened in just 3 pages. I'd rather seen it a little more spread around

i love when people get "powers" that alow the story to reach it's peak, keep up the good work. i cant wait for a sequel!!!!!!!!!!!

I really like this so far. I can't wait to find out what comes next.

I'm glad you all enjoyed the story. Don't worry, I've got all sorts of things planned for Mike.

So far i liked this story and enjoyed it and i hope to see lots more of it

I really liked this story. I hope that there are more installations of it cumming soon. 😀

Great setup, eagerly awaiting the next installment.

Probably would not have occurred to me, if you had not mentioned removing the tubes that had kept him alive during his coma, but didn't the catheter get in the way when the nurse was sucking and fucking him?

I did not think of that, but you're right. Obviously it's a good thing that I'm not a doctor.

For how long? How could the hospital staff not see the physical changes made to his body? Why were his family members so indifferent? Was he still covered by insurance? Where does he live if he is not going to have further contact with his family? How does he even pay for a cup of coffee, let alone eat a meal? And, who are these people and what do they do for society besides control and mentally manipulate them for sexual purposes?

it seems like a pretty shallow reason for immortals to exist.

Come of it @rightbank, it's a storyv and doesn't need to be accurate in every way. If he had this post then bills, rent, food will no longer be an issue

As to it bring a shallower reason for immortals to exist: did you not realise that you are looking at a sex story site? Of course they'll be sex. You may be on the wrong site if this annoys you

To the author: Highly enjoyable story. Well written, enjoyed the development, I hope you do a follow up

I see where your criticisms are coming from, but let's be honest, you're coming to this site to read stories about people fucking. The specific plot points involves in getting to the sex might not always be realistic. See the comment above about Mike probably having a catheter in. I'm not going to spend my time making sure that every little detail makes perfect sense, cause that would get in the way of what people are really reading these stories for. Also, I think that stories that have to lay out every single little detail don't really trust the reader. You're all smart enough to fill in the blanks. How Mike and Clara can afford to eat shouldn't be something I have to spell out for you.

As for your problem with them wasting their immortality on sex, stick around. Chapter 3 is going to have some more background about the general society of these people. And also sex, lots of sex.

Well, I'm sort of here for the fucking. I think some readers come to a site like Literotica for more than just the sex. Generally, I am here for + sex. I want stories about people that have sex that is either more graphic or more diverse than you would find in some of the explicit romance novels. So my needs as a reader are met because there are writers who do that. There is something here for everyone- there are stories on here that offend me, others that aren't that realistic, others that are just wham-bam-thank you ma'am with no character building or plot line to speak of. I tend to jump from story to story through the similar stories recommended link or by the tags link. Mind control isn't usually my thing, but I checked it out any way because it scored high in a list I was scanning.

Critiques are good and should help the writer become better, but I don't think writers should shape their stories to the demands of the audience. If DapperestDan wants to focus more on the sex, rather than on the accuracy/reality of the circumstances surrounding his characters, that's his prerogative. I only really get upset when a writer's technical skills are so sloppy that it derails me from getting lost in the story- bad spelling, major grammatical errors, or use of quotations that are so bad you have to stop and figure out who is speaking.

I think the inherent ability awakening, having a mentor to guide a newbie through the process, and the mind navigation process are pretty interesting, and the idea of not becoming addicted to the power are going to make an intriguing tale.

Well done! A lot of background done well before the raunchy action gets going.

A very well thought out story with lots of detail.

Interesting story...