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All Comments on 'The Breeder Vampire'

by thelizzard

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sandgoseeksandgoseekover 9 years ago
Ok so

Main tip, let the story flow a bit more. The story's approach to sex mirrors Heuw's own: brief, jarring, and distant. Biggest rule in writing is show, don't tell. Follow that and you'll be gold.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Make a sequel or make it longer

Please

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Women have no will ?

Dumb, wasted my time.

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