All Comments on 'I'm Going to Dance'

Beguile me with the flow of your words, the rhythm of your lines and leave me once again admiring your skills. Top class.

I read this elsewheres.

Once again, incredible work.

5+

Wonderful poem. I read it 3 times and picked up some new gems each time. Eg,

"Whose sweetness

Calls

Glory

Is going to surround me..."

Even though the above are in two separates stanzas, the way the short lines were structured, I wanted to put an exclamation point after "Glory," and the resulting image seemed compatible with the assertive seductive dancer. It made me smile.

"Make Angels cry

To sin again."

The line of the month as far as I'm concerned.

Quibble: Although "Entrance" is a perfectly good word, I was predisposed to place emphasis on the first syllable as in entrance to a building, rather than an entranced lover. The dance stopped momentarily for me at that point. I wondered if there might have been a better word used.

Magnetron recommended others read your poem over in Poetry Feedback & Discussion. I hope they too.

Really wonderful erotica

swaying dance :)

Need i raphsodize further on this beauty of a Poem ?!!

Five.

I loved that line, Angels cry. This poem moved me in a way that excited me, made me want to dance, made me lose my breath. I love it, and it was just beautifully written.

I'm going to breathe now.

This is really hot, I'm dripping :)

"Ease slowly

Out of everything

That I was not born in"

Is a passage I wish I'd come up with.