by qdata
Your build up in chapter one was fantastic, chapter two was also very erotic but there isn't enough of it. It's too short - not the worst criticism you could get *G* add some more story weight to chapter 2 or you could continue in a chapter 3
this was a hot story and i wish to hear more in chapter 3 if there is one!
Maybe 'cause I may be a bit dense; this story finished with a pleasant surprise - Mommie and Daughter getting it on. I always knew lingerie was sexy - but this story really brings that out big time!
When do we hear about the special pants you bought? Great story.
Lovely story
And a minor quibble:
@"I kissed my way down to her breasts and sucked her amazing nipple into my mouth,"
2 breasts, 1 nipple ? Is the nipple amazing because it sit in the valley between her breasts ? :D
love VvV