All Comments on 'The Stray Girl'

by Midday_Crisis

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AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
I liked it, suprisingly

I usually get annoyed by manipulative bastards/bitches in stories but oddly i found Mary rather sweet in her own way. I would like it if this became a series.

Best of luck.

Texan065Texan065over 9 years ago
Surprisingly Good

I don't normally read these kinds of stories but, I gave this one a chance. It was surprisingly good. I liked all three characters very much. Thanks for sharing an awesome story.

MajorRewriteMajorRewriteover 9 years ago
Amusingly unrealistic.

Reality bites! Fantasy is much more fun.

Good story.

IamTakuanIamTakuanover 9 years ago
Very Nice

Found myself rooting for them and wanting more...Very Nice! Just the right mix of a beautiful fantasy from an older guy's point of view; with the semi-crazy mix of contradictory impulses that define many, particularly young, women. Enjoyed it very Much!

Sid0604Sid0604over 9 years ago
Thank you...

I enjoyed reading your story. Thank you for sharing.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Very Good

My only wish is that there had been a scene describing what the two girls would get up to when they went out together.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Finally

You are one of the few who can develop a story line and continue it. Please continue this story.

rightbankrightbankover 9 years ago
close, but not quite

the drama around the "pill" was irresponsible.

chris73170chris73170over 9 years ago
please continue

please continue the story i loved it

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Good story

Good story. Please continue. Thanks.

searchingforperfectionsearchingforperfectionabout 9 years ago
Liked it

Granted, the characters could have been developed a little more; but that would probably have made the story too long.

I do think the seduction could have been drawn out a little more, subtly.

As it happens, this story hit one of my buttons so I really did enjoy it.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Shame...

Shame you didn't continue this hot story. Really fun if daughter could have been included. But alas, I think that little minx Mary would have made him miserable in the long run, she's way to smart and head strong.

Really a fun read. Thank you!

Chief3BlanketChief3Blanketover 7 years ago
Enjoyed another one

This story could have been continued. Then again it did reach a point where the future for this couple was obvious.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 4 years ago
Jusr one little nit to pick

One should NEVER use petroleum jelly as a personal lubricant lubricant. Ah bee ya da bee ya da bee ya.........that's all folks!!!

Regards,

Paul

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