Comments on Novels and Novellas

Yeah, looking at the epilog again leaves me with more questions than answers.

They finished high school, but you didn't really FTDS. I hope you do a sequel covering the summer break and then college.

Also, rubbing on every guy's erection at prom and girls making out naked in bed is pretty far over the line so it seems ridiculous that they didn't do more....

This was nicely done. I enjoyed it from start to finish. I think the following information should be of interest to you and your editor.

Albeit is a conjunction meaning “even though” or “although.” It's always written as one word, not as “all be it.” “Albeit” is used to introduce...

There is no grease embedded over years in the creases of the skin. The epidermis of a human regenerates completely in roughly a month. Apart from that, the dark stuff that is difficult to wash away after working with metal for the most part consists of dust from abrasion, embedded...

Thank You for another Great Story..!!!

I have to agree with acup, wonderful story and it would make a great series...

That's a damn fine story, Mark. Thanks for an enjoyable Sunday read.

Great story…

Thank you, I love how Evelyn became her own in the end

Too much senseless sex for my taste but the story is being carefully crafted and I feel my self unable to just drop it. So fair is fair to comment and praise your skills.

Yeah ... what they said. Thanks for agreat story

The Toni, Bill storyline is getting so irritating I've actually stopped reading it when their names are mentioned.

Excellent! You knocked this one out of the park. Five well-deserved stars for this. Thanks so much for sharing.

Bill is playing with fire messing with roberts family

Nothing better than a markelly story. Easy 5 stars!

I finally convinced my wife to take dancing lessons with me.

We are so much better

You have such a fine ability to weave through a labyrinth of characters, the elements of the scenes around them, and the actions that brought them together. I thoroughly enjoy every story.

This one, as much as any, shows a profound understanding of honor and duty, heroism and...

I enjoyed this, thank you

You never disappoint. Wonderful story, I couldn’t put it down

Another wonderful story. Is this going to be a one off, or a short series?

Nice adventure/ romance story! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

You certainly know how to end. Excellent.

Thanks. I'm just gonna go along for the ride loving it so far..

Thanks...

Lance

Waitasec... Are Niki and Anna still alive?

I love fictional history and you have started down a wonderful road that I check in each day to see where it leads. Sometimes a little more character development, like having him talk to the brothers a little more in a conversation to give us a better idea about them. You have done...

I think the simulation revelation has ruined the story logic.

Who does Pilgrim think he is having sex with? Does he believe that it's a simulation, as the Pope told him? In that case, does he think the women are other humans? Then, where did they come from? Or does he think they...

It's getting more and more interesting with every single chapter. I'm almost the same engaged as with your Chronicles of Hvad - and that's the highest praise I can give. When can we expect next chapter? Or how many are there going to be in general? Thank you for your immaculate work,...

superb.

Think this may have been my favorite chapter of the series. I’ll leave it at that. Very well done.

what an incentive to come back alive

Very interesting and enjoyable series. Thank you

Three years training for one mission, and he was being plays, as so it seems the woman bought in as extra's. What will be revealed next?

As a hindu girl, what I wouldn't do to be in the place of Deval Devi!!! What a romantic and sexual partner and journey she had.

What a painful read. It has the makings of a good story, if only you knew how to write. The pacing and flow is off. Your dialogue is unnatural. The story disjointed and all over the place. It’s so painful to read I barely finished the first page!

I have to wonder if English is your...

good work I am enjoying it very much, thank you !