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Nor a "stiff, swollen, giant, rock-hard cock."
This is a thread about adjectives, and the main 'point' will be to give some examples of how they may be kept to a minimum.
Of course 'quality' is also an issue; the ones used should be good ones, not as above. Adjective problems are rampant in bad porn, romance, or erotica, indeed in bad 'creative' writing in general.
Everyone is free to join in, but if you're unsure of what an adjective is, listen for a bit, first.
For the grammatically unsure. Sentences must indicate an action or change, or state of being. Let's stick to simple sentences.
Taking the first case, action (indicated by the verb) whatever 'acts' is the subject. "The *man came." There may also be an object, "The woman stroked her *breasts."
You will, for a first rough idea, find nouns in either the subject or object position. A noun 'names a person place or thing' is the traditional definition.
Any word preceding the noun is generally 'modifying' it in some way**, as to its quality ('what sort of thing?') number (how many) or location ('which one?'). All modifiers of nouns are adjectives, including 'a, an, and the', additionally referred to as articles. We are not going to be discussing handling or reducing articles.
In the two examples, the additional words marked * are adjectives:
The *thin, *wiry, *American man came.
The *voluptuous, *young woman stroked her *two, *full, *throbbing, *beautiful, *melon breasts.
(The words 'American' and 'two' and 'melon' might, in another context be nouns, but they are not, here).
If someone would supply some writing that's good and sparse in adjectives, great!
J.
**Added: provided that the preceding words are independently applicable to the noun, and not modifying other modifiers: Example: " He hit the big, heavy, red ball." All adjectives.
But: "He picked up the very heavy ball." Very is an adverb; only 'heavy' is an adjective.
================[EXAMPLE]=================
Here is an example, chosen almost at random, from a popular, otherwise well-written story at literotica, which I won't identify further. Is there an adjective problem?
"Oh my god Tommy, oh god oh god oh god, mmm..." she groaned as Tommy pushed aside the skimpy material of her white thong to plunge his tongue between her gaping pussy lips. Her inner labia were so moist with her fluid that she grew light headed, the overwhelming pleasure between her sensuous long legs seeming to draw her to the brink of unconsciousness. Amy felt Tommy's nose press gently against her neatly trimmed, soft brown pubic hair, her pussy gorging his chin in moisture as he swirled his tongue powerfully against her aching clitoris. The shattering sensation made her lovely face contort with blissful agony as she moaned his name over and over, and she placed her palm atop his head as though by doing so she were acknowledging his sexual prowess.
"Tommy oh Jesus Tommy that feels so, sooo good..." she groaned softly, feeling the opening phases of an orgasm beginning to unfold deep within her sumptuous young body, an orgasm a thousand times more powerful than any she had ever achieved through her own hands and fantasies.
Amy's trimmed, wet young pussy was so breathtaking to look at that sucking it was a double pleasure. Her labia quivered beautifully, uncontrollably as the stimulus of Tommy's expert tongue shattered her vulnerable clitoris, and her long thighs rested on his shoulders pornographically as he ate her out with merciless hunger. The young virgin moaned in that unique, blissful sound of excruciating pleasure as Tommy drew the tip of his tongue slowly against the soft lips of her vaginal opening, her clit seeming to scream for mercy as it was fondled by Tommy's thumb and forefinger. She knew she was going to cum, and her thighs began to squeeze against Tommy's ears as she felt her climax begin to tear through her glistening young body.
This is a thread about adjectives, and the main 'point' will be to give some examples of how they may be kept to a minimum.
Of course 'quality' is also an issue; the ones used should be good ones, not as above. Adjective problems are rampant in bad porn, romance, or erotica, indeed in bad 'creative' writing in general.
Everyone is free to join in, but if you're unsure of what an adjective is, listen for a bit, first.
For the grammatically unsure. Sentences must indicate an action or change, or state of being. Let's stick to simple sentences.
Taking the first case, action (indicated by the verb) whatever 'acts' is the subject. "The *man came." There may also be an object, "The woman stroked her *breasts."
You will, for a first rough idea, find nouns in either the subject or object position. A noun 'names a person place or thing' is the traditional definition.
Any word preceding the noun is generally 'modifying' it in some way**, as to its quality ('what sort of thing?') number (how many) or location ('which one?'). All modifiers of nouns are adjectives, including 'a, an, and the', additionally referred to as articles. We are not going to be discussing handling or reducing articles.
In the two examples, the additional words marked * are adjectives:
The *thin, *wiry, *American man came.
The *voluptuous, *young woman stroked her *two, *full, *throbbing, *beautiful, *melon breasts.
(The words 'American' and 'two' and 'melon' might, in another context be nouns, but they are not, here).
If someone would supply some writing that's good and sparse in adjectives, great!
J.
**Added: provided that the preceding words are independently applicable to the noun, and not modifying other modifiers: Example: " He hit the big, heavy, red ball." All adjectives.
But: "He picked up the very heavy ball." Very is an adverb; only 'heavy' is an adjective.
================[EXAMPLE]=================
Here is an example, chosen almost at random, from a popular, otherwise well-written story at literotica, which I won't identify further. Is there an adjective problem?
"Oh my god Tommy, oh god oh god oh god, mmm..." she groaned as Tommy pushed aside the skimpy material of her white thong to plunge his tongue between her gaping pussy lips. Her inner labia were so moist with her fluid that she grew light headed, the overwhelming pleasure between her sensuous long legs seeming to draw her to the brink of unconsciousness. Amy felt Tommy's nose press gently against her neatly trimmed, soft brown pubic hair, her pussy gorging his chin in moisture as he swirled his tongue powerfully against her aching clitoris. The shattering sensation made her lovely face contort with blissful agony as she moaned his name over and over, and she placed her palm atop his head as though by doing so she were acknowledging his sexual prowess.
"Tommy oh Jesus Tommy that feels so, sooo good..." she groaned softly, feeling the opening phases of an orgasm beginning to unfold deep within her sumptuous young body, an orgasm a thousand times more powerful than any she had ever achieved through her own hands and fantasies.
Amy's trimmed, wet young pussy was so breathtaking to look at that sucking it was a double pleasure. Her labia quivered beautifully, uncontrollably as the stimulus of Tommy's expert tongue shattered her vulnerable clitoris, and her long thighs rested on his shoulders pornographically as he ate her out with merciless hunger. The young virgin moaned in that unique, blissful sound of excruciating pleasure as Tommy drew the tip of his tongue slowly against the soft lips of her vaginal opening, her clit seeming to scream for mercy as it was fondled by Tommy's thumb and forefinger. She knew she was going to cum, and her thighs began to squeeze against Tommy's ears as she felt her climax begin to tear through her glistening young body.
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