All Comments on 'An Empire of Ashes'

I've been obsessed with butterflies lately - I love this.

Has a Janus-like feel to it ~ be either a killer or victim. The symmetry of the piece had me bouncing between the 2 strophes.

I agree with the last comment, this fine piece deserves an E along side the nice big red H .... E for excellent.

I loved it, had to read it a few times and each time seemed better :)

a perfect poem. being crushed never sounded so fucking nice.

great job...you need an E.

i haven't commented on a "New Poem" in a while, but i like your style, your images, your subtlety. and i like everything about this poem,

except the capital letters at the beginning of each line.

it is my opinion that your writing is too good, in modern terms, to hold true to that antique and arbitrary method. it actually hurts the poem, i think, by placing emphasis in the wrong place in many instances.

you are a fine addition to Lit.

TheRainMan

I knew it was good after the first read. After the second, I realized it was excellent.

This is really, really good. Thank you for sharing. Loved it.

-Curiouswife

My chin literally dropped reading this. I think I said this before, that you have eye-catching poem titles. This poem matched and topped it. I really do like the image you got going here of the butterfly smear in a hand to a cocoon. Very nice stuff, thanks.