All Comments on 'Based On A True Story'

The most poetically finished of this new writer's submissions,

it could be immediately improved with a new title.

The affectation of lowercase "i" is annoying,

and "enough" and "laugh" do not rhyme.

but should this

so i vision you as you laugh,

read "envision"?

Great work!

A very sweet romantic piece, but at the very least, caps for the pronoun "I".

If the Angels have a Sweetheart ~ may I be yours?

now knowing save me a plot. TK U MLJ LV NV