- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Brooms are for Cobwebs
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Brooms are for Cobwebs
Words black with venom
hissed through serpent lips,
spiteful
biting
hurtful
Poison sinking in
you’re worthless
you’re unlovable
Cracks wrack your back
the broom handle breaks
relentless
insistent
unceasing
Driving home the point
you’re not wanted
die, damn you!
NO
Busted ribs don’t bate your breath
Words and whippings
won’t squelch your spirit
They harden your resolve
to survive
Morning arrives, bag packed
goodbyes whispered with pleas for silence
and a clean escape
but no tears
in eyes clear with intent and understanding
the unknown awaits
but even death would be better than this
How many solitary miles must be logged
and cold sweat soaked beds laid in
before this toxin is purged
How many lovers will you enfold
in efforts to exorcize these demons
just to leave an empty space
able to accept fulfillment
- COMMENTS
LeBrozover 17 years agoThis poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 34,000 poems.
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LeBrozover 17 years agoAn incredibly powerful write of the victims of abuse and their need to escape, to heal and finally, begin again to live life.
LilDarlinover 19 years agoWow.. This poem reaches out and Grabbs ya.. Love the whole thing. Flow is smooth as silk. Imagery is insightful. Loved it..More Please~~!!!
Tathagataover 19 years agoIt plays out...I do agree it's almost like two poems.
One deals with the physical...one the emotions.
I don't see anything wrong with it...probably because I tend to write that way too.
: )
Some great word choices and images...
That last stanza is a powerful one.
Nice work
Anonymousover 19 years agoOuch, Tung, this one is so vivid in imagery you can feel it.. it hurts. Nice work.
Vampiric_Mirageover 19 years ago"Words black with venom
hissed through serpent lips"
From the first two lines you caught my attention. This is an excellent poem dealing with a very sensitive issue. I agree with jd4george (to some extent) that the title doesn't quite seem to fit the poem in spots. As for jd4george's idea that "...the emotions were getting in the way of your heart." Don't the emotions reveal what you feel in your heart? Isn't poetry supposed to be emotional?...Anyways, thanx for sharing this with us all & well done!
BlueskyBeautyover 19 years agowere we not just talking about them critters last night??
tt, there's nothing more i can add to what i've already said..cept maybe ty!
someday i'll try writing this, we'll compare emotion 3 months from now ~grinzzz~
xo
Maria2394over 19 years agoand an abused mom and/or wife. I do think your emotions play a huge part in this, but I tend to like emotional poetry :)
jd4georgeover 19 years ago...and the image in the title offers awesome possibilities. While I found some nice, hard images and phrases throughout, I also found myself suspecting the emotions were getting in the way of your heart.
I'd really like to see this poem in another 3 months!
