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Click hereCircling the Square's Block
To ship a box
around this sphere
I drove to Circle Street's Square
Watched a ball rise
above the horizontal line
saw a flying triangle in the air
I ended up boxed in
from going directly into a u-turn
now I am square in a 'round about' way
Bounce my thoughts
thought outside of the box
circling the Square's block, I wave
(6/12/06) Art ~
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 35,000 poems.
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that someone can square the circle...I agree with wso...you are getting very crafty...blue
good grief, i want whatever the heck it is you're reading. the difference in your writing is definately showing in the poems you submit.
i like the humour in this piece. i also liked the verbs and seemingly lack of over the top adjectives... there seem to be enough to keep the poem moving from beginning to end.
i also like the near rhyming you have used, the more i read this poem the more poetic devices i see you've used.
a couple of places seem a little wordy (when i speak the poem out loud my tongue gets kinda twisted about). it might be my accent (not that i have one) but 'Circle Street's Square' seems easier for me to say as Circle Street Square. i've no idea if that messes up the grammar, you might want to check that.
keep writing Art, you're doing great!
wso