All Comments on 'The river'

by Joseki Ko

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AnonymousAnonymousover 20 years ago
"Do"

IMHO your last stanza greatly weakens the entire poem with the stilted sentence construction in the first and last lines.

"It has fish that do swim

It ?s current does flow

Fishermen to fish

And boats that do row"

Since you do not keep a consistant meter between stanzas, why not try something like:

"It has fish that swim

And currents that flow

Fishermen to fish

And boats to row"

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