All Comments on 'Alien Impulses'

I think I love it. I have just perused a few pages and love the clearly written language and punctuation as well as the story theme. I think I have read this before, but I intend to read it again this week. Thanks very much for sharing.

I loved it and want more...less characters, less details...more literotica next time.

Moar?

This is feedback.

I enjoyed the story greatly.. A pity it does not seem to continue.

This story is fantastic is all I can say. VERY WELL WRITTEN!!!

Off to read more?

Thanks again

https://www.amazon.com/Voyage-Pauls-Travels-Paul-Lockman-ebook/dp/B005HIT2OA

In case you want to finish reading this story

A space elevator is attached to a satellite in geosynchronous orbit. For Earth that height is 23,000 miles. So you wouldn't get into an elevator and travel from orbit to the planets surface in a few minutes or even hours.

If you were going 200 mph, it would take 115 hours or 4.8 days in the elevator. You would need food, water, bathrooms, beds, etc, for however many people were in the elevator.

Nice story I hope you finish it

I normally check the comments to see that a story isn’t left hanging before reading it but the 40pages tricked me into assuming this was a whole story. Incase anyone checks comments like I do for this reason I will just state here this story isn’t finished and likely won’t ever be considering it’s been so long since this was released .

story, from one end to the other. Except it requires a sequel - it simply cannot end at the nascent spaceport. What a phenom start you have accomplished. Well done!

Once upon a time, there was science fiction and there was fantasy. The space race fostered greater interest in sci-fi, but it leveled out after man reached the moon. A marketing move to sell sci-fi and fantasy as one genre made some classic SF writers rich. Andre Norton comes to mind. George R. R. Martin was writing hard SF 25 years ago. Those of you who consider this good sci-fi, I recommend you not read Bear, Benford, Niven, etc. You probably won’t comprehend it.

I wasn’t much bothered by spelling errors because of repeated inconsistencies and contradictions of speed and distances. This came to a head on page 19 when “a gentle push accelerated the ship to 1% of C (incorrectly notated as 1C instead of .01C) in one minute.” Since this would require acceleration of over 5000 G’s; I realized that the author does not know/has not researched enough science relevant to space travel to figure out how to dump organic waste to vacuum!

There may be slaves, serfs, or a proletariat class in space in the future, but socialism won’t get us there. The technology necessary will require levels of exceptionalism that can only come from free thought and competition. Competiton is the way of life, from the weeds in your garden to predators and prey. The best socialism can offer is a simmering mass of mediocrity.

Young, hip, black Englishman (with no name) goes to space and fucks hundreds(?), yet eventually falls in love with the 4th woman he has sex with, who just HAPPENS to be of the same minority skin color. Now that’s not very open minded and inclusive, is it? Had the story continued in that direction and become public knowlege, it might have been perceived as discrimination and reduced his popularity.

Our hero has been biologically enhanced giving him superhuman sexual prowess. He can fuck for hours, come a dozen times by the gallon, and has literally millions (if not BILLIONS) of women eager to fuck him. He expressed unease with gay/bi sex, yet with relative equanimity he has mutual anal sex with Xathan in the threesome with Jasira. I’m not buying it. If you are, I have a deal for you on a bridge.

I might have continued reading, but I skipped to the comments to find the story continued in a second volume on Amazon. Reviews of it suggest the story still is a cliffhanger, so I’m out.

Well written, well paced and I was hooked. Hope you finish it off.

Are there more chapters???? PLEASE!!!!! Loved the story and the writing was superb. Very engaging.

Your story is so great that in remembering it almost 10 years after I first read it. I firmly believe you could make a living out of writing your stories, but you'd need to take after Tefler and release them in chapters, create a Patreon.com account and release each new chapter over there first before releasing to general public on here. I hope to see more new content from you soon!

please finish I would like know how it ended.

I really enjoyed this. Please continue the story line.

What can we say GREAT

You motivated me to write a first comment here, as a pale retribution for your work.

I'm not a literature specialist, just a common reader, but loved your story that unfold into a Novel.

I imagine you wrote it along several months, under different inspirational drivers and motivations: sometimes more descriptive and rich of details, some other times more fluid to show the following plot. Regardless of the style, my feel is that you made a great and pleasurable work; grammar checking and spelling also contribute to pleasure of reading - a recent point that a remember eligible to be revised would be the proper context of word hangEr, that here (airport, spaceport, etc) should be hangAr - but that was a minor; as an overall, your writing and creative thinking is very fluid and fun (good humor too) to follow.

I also believe you didn't originally imagine (when you decided to write it) to have all these milieus on earth and other worlds, but you also deserve congratulations to keep most elements tight and coherent along the overall plot. This attention to details is quite enjoyable, thank you.

I would love to see continuation of this novel, and I know how demanding the act of writing can be. Being just a reader here, I would like to address certain points that might help you to continue with such work of art and entertainment:

- You have already created the long main plot, but there are several side stories that could be explored meanwhile.

- Continuation could maintain the same novel or novella styles, or it could be presented and cycle short stories, rotating among these milieus plots from this first novel.

- Secondary Character stories could be another way to continue the story, or further develop that part of the overall plot.

In this case, maybe you could even plot a flowchart-like with time-line kind of graph, concatenating these stories; in the future, as you publish other stories, sharing such plot could help us and specially a more recent reader to understand the cross-relationship among stories.

- As Earth history does not affect causality on other worlds, more developed and far away, a future side stories could explore possible alternative realities for Earth, with eventual feedback sent to Earth thru subspace channel to Phoenix and Hal.

- Other points of view - plotted in time-continuous, or jumping time (same trick used in TV series):

.. Military (initially RAF and then other Nations),

.. Gemma (and other future earth girls),

.. Falik (and other alien girls),

.. Earth-Environment, Scientist-related views (Earth and Aliens plots)

Thank you again for all and I / we look forward to read your work!

This story should be in the Kindle book store!!! That's good I think it is.

Any chance this story will ever be finished? It's great!

Hey Farmerboy...please continue. An excellent story with a wealth of possibilities..Thanks for a great start..

Kept me hooked, absolutely loved it!! I almost cried when got to the end, didn't realize I had read it all :( buuut the n reading through the comments I stumble onto yours and , having checked your​ account, I was THRILLED to see this message "I have finished 'Alien Impulses' and it is now available on Amazon and Smashwords with the title 'Voyage', by C Paul Lockman. The sequel is entitled 'Clarion', and is also available.

Drop me a line at cplockman@gmail.com

Thanks for reading!"

Need I say where I'm going now?? Thank you so much!!!

LadyNova

THIS IS THE BEST STORY I HAVE EVER READ PLEASE DO NOT STOP I NEED TO KNOW HOW THIS ENDS THERE IS SO MUCH HERE IM BEGGING YOU

Please finish the story. We all need your visions.

What a great piece of writing, had me glued to it. Please please finish the story, wherever it goes, love it.

Absolutely the best story I've had the pleasure to read. I read it straight thru to this non ending. Masterfully written in Great detail. I truly look forward to the completion of this fabulous piece of work.

Thank You

Great story

Hope you finish it soon so we all know the ending.

Good storyline great storytelling hot sex keep it up your are doing a top job and I wait the next chapter

Astounding effort!! Hope to see more but I'll definitely look for the who book and sequel.

i've never read a story here, that is as good as this - you must follow up.

your tenderness in sex is to be admired - i agree it would be good to fuck all day - i love all the sex you described esp. with the first 3 girls and Gemma - wish you spent more time describing their breasts, and hers

smashing tale - thanks!

I've never been hooked onto a Literotica article that showcased a novel like story with a satisfying number of sexual intercourses.You my man are phenomenal.Thanks.

Nicely crafted using thought provoking scenarios of technologies yet to be. Well interspersed with tantilizingly erotic sexual adventures that felt real. Nice to know that Aliens enjoy sex as much as we do!

This story... you're a fuckin legend. This took me 3 hours to read, and I read all of it. Thanks a ton for making this :)

I hope you finish I love this story!

Absolutely amazing story. Needs an ending though. Hope. One comes soon enough!

I have loved reading this tale, it's so compelling and well constructed.

Only criticism is that it could do with a bit of proof reading as there are a few spelling mistakes and incorrect words here and there, however, this doesn't detract from the quality of the story.

Please consider completing the tale, I'd love to know if he makes it back to Falkirk and Takanli or if he decides to stay on earth with Gemma, or does he manage to wangle both?

Thank you

I loved the sex mixed with sci fi. I will look for the sequel. Nice job!

Any chance I'll ever live in this reality?

Very much enjoyed reading this.Please don't end this story.Parts are a little out there but general its nicely put together.Your imagination is first class and quite inspirational

My imagination is the same with any story as well but lack the ability to hold conversations and interact with my characters so end up with stories that are a bit flat so to speak.Anyway thanks for entertaining me for a little time.

Yours. Jim Harrison

Paul Lockman (Farmerboy) has finished a sequel to the full version of this story! It's called 'Clarion' and is available at Amazon on pre-order, with a release date of 21st December. Check it out!

By far the best I've read on Literotica! But the end was like a premature ejaculation. The story ended leaving me on a limbo. Waiting for the sequel.

By far my favourite story I've read yet! Please keep up the writing, I would love to see the story finished!

Please tell me there's more to his story. It just keeps getting better and better. Continue

loved the story except for the global warming sea level scare crap. If you had kept it at a clean up of pollution help all peoples type of level would have been more acceptable.

I know you will NEVER finish this story but I would love that you did. Thank you for this story but I want more.

Amazed and wish I could see the finished article.. would enjoy a good long story with this quality unfortunately they are hard to come by, so write and let your imagination expand.. allow us to see your thoughts and keep us entertained.

Loved it... I am a little amazed at the work that went into this considering people get to read this for free.. Really impressive and imaginative, sure its a little far fetched in spots, but isn't that what sci/fi is about? ... wow. Don't be deterred by the haters and pretentious windbags, keep at it, really good ideas here.

MORE MORE MORE

Please keep the story going.

This story is long. If you took the time to read it you would know why its so long.

It was AMAZING.

I enjoyed it but found the last ten or so pages showing the writer's fatigue. It seems the plot kept him going rather than lives and emotions of the characters. The science was fun, except where it was obviously ridiculous. Imagine the G force of decelerating from even 10% light speed in 2 hours as he does returning to earth, much less 30 times light speed. The guy would have been a molecule thick slime on the inside of the spaceship.

The environmentalist diatribe got a bit tiring too.

I also felt like the author was in the dark with a flashlight looking for the next string to guide the plot along. For example, why not just have the ship at the bottom of the lake fly itself out and go the to bottom of the Irish Sea? Nope, we need to take them to Europa! At that point I didn't think I'd finish but stuck with it till the end.

However, those are trifles. What really disappoints is leaving the readers cheated of an ending. I know how hard it is to finish a story but anyone who gives the author their attention for page after page deserves a climax and a denouement. I understand that the writer finished this and is selling it online, which is fine, but to hook readers and leave them like this just bad form.

So I vote 5 for effort and an amusing diversion, but a 0 for responsibility, and maybe a 3 for plot and sadly 2 for character development. There is really very little to like about our hero and he seems paper thin.

Amazing! Great plot ,engaging style and interesting material.

Great, didn't even need the sex

I totally enjoyed the sci-fi parts, didn't worry so much about the "emotions" aspect, couldn't figure out what was different about the sex he was having in a civilization that was drop trou and boff anybody anyway... but, please return to the writing of this story, or do we need a Bofin to halo you with a red cube?

I've very thoroughly enjoyed this draft, I do hope you continue at some point instead of just leaving it as it is.

it would be a shame just to stop here please continue at your earliest convenience.

P.S. one heck of an imagination.

N.D.

More of the same, great read

I like this. You stop too soon... MORE !!! ... please ...?

I will say it cause no one else will, I disliked the main character. He is too good of a person, and well for someone who is supposed to have emotions on an alien world he showed none. One paragraph head spent on the realization his parents were dead and that he was truly alone. Sex can only solve so many things and it is clear that he should have had issues.

Good writing, but lacking in realism and like ability.

Can't wait for the continuation. As well as the high standard of writing, my mind boggles at your imagination. Well done.

Im just trying to get a much better understanding of what it is. I would buy it if its a book and not a download. But it does not say in the posted information about it. All it says is that its the Kindle Edition and I don't know what that means. So please clarify if its a book or a digital download thank you. Thanks for the great story even though it's not completely finished on this website.

Too good for me to adequately praise! It demanded a non-stop marathon reading session.

Best Wishes

John Pan Yon

By far this is easily one of the best story I've ever read on the site so far, and trust me i have read many. U have one killer imagination, one hell of a brain and an outstanding writing skills! Can't wait to read the next installments. Keep it up!

By far the best story I've read on the site so far. U have one killer imagination and outstanding writing skills! Can't wait to read more.

Amazing story such great literature this could really compare with professional works hope to see the rest of it :-)

I hope you get to complete this story. It is already on par with"professional" literature.

You are sure going in the good direction.

Damn good story, but where is the rest f it?? I really enjoyed this "taste" and want to get the finish

I've been reading LITEROTICA for years, and this is the first time I've ever posted a comment on any story. I'm posting anonymously, as I won't be bothered to sign up for sake of making *one* post.

"Alien Impulses" is a well written and well thought out work of science fiction erotica. Other posters have done a better job than I of describing this, so I'll not even try. Some minor plot details, numerous typos, and a decidedly socialist point of view aside, this is, and remains a good, high-quality story, and I'd love to sing it's praises.

I can't.

I'm not a fit judge of whether one story or another is good enough for publication or not. Anyone who completes a story and posts it here has my utmost respect; it's more than I've accomplished. I look forward to enjoying many more free stories on LITEROTICA.

When someone starts a story and posts it here, then doesn't finish it because their life get's in the way, that's one thing.

When someone posts an unfinished (and very engaging) story here, then says essentially, that there will be a charge for the rest... that is quite another.

The author subsequently published the completed version of this story for profit elsewhere on the Internet.

The author puts no mention that there will be a charge for the end of the story in his introductory comment.

I've been conned.

The very least the author should have done, is to tell the reader they must buy the completed story ftom the start.

Now having said all this, I wish the author every success with his writing, and while he won't be making any from me, I hope he makes a lot of money from his stories.

And now, I yield the soap-box to the next malcontent... ;^)

I really like the history, and I hope you finish it.

Good work.

The way you create your story is like an art-form. Precise yet beautiful. Amazing job, would love to see you finish it.

This is an enjoyable tale with many sub-plots interacting with the main story. You have left the story open for a continuation... please let it continue. I have enjoyed the experience so far and do hope there will be more to round out the goals of the main characters. Thank you for letting us, the readers, share in your dreams.

masterfully webbed romance sci-fi. pls, the non conclusive of this hyper-skilled work is killing.....

A fabulous yarn. I am a bit disappointed that you haven't added anything since 2008! :( Can you please finish it?

Thanks!

Hi everyone,

Thanks for reading, and for making this story so popular. I've completed this chapter and it's available as an Ebook; many of you have been in touch with ideas and suggestions, and I'm so grateful.

There have been some comments recently which need clarification. Firstly, every word of this story was written by the same person, namely me - C Paul Lockman. There is no plagiarism. The concepts, characters etc are my own.

Secondly, I welcome discussion of the story but cannot welcome unsubstantiated and purposefully overcritical comments from anonymous readers. I don't believe that makes me overly sensitive, only proud of my work and keen to see it maturely and sincerely discussed. Opinions on the writing style, for instance, would need examples to support the point. Besides, I don't detect a significant difference between the style of what's available here, and the completed Ebook; they were, after all, written by the same man, in the same month!

My email address is cplockman@gmail.com if you would like to discuss this, or my other works. In the meantime, let's get back to enjoying quality space-opera-porn, or however one might choose to categorize this tale!

Best,

C Paul Lockman

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The work here is exceptional. The work that is purchased on amazon is very bad. The parts here are almost completely the same and are great. the part 3 is a totally different writing style and has several things contrary to what is written in part 1 and 2. Even the mentality in how it is written is very different.. It also leaves you at a major cliff hanger more so than here. And still no end in sight of this story...

Has taken me almost a week to get through the 3rd part. The first 2 parts I have read here many times and took only 1 and 1/2 days to read again after I purchased on amazon. The 3rd part is just that hard to stay focused on its that poorly written and so out of character.

maybe to show how stubborn I can be about censorship. i should write a very detailed explanation of how bad part 3 is, including examples and past it to a text file on my desktop so I can post it here multiple times here daily.. Or maybe I will just post this daily..

censorship just shows how much your trying to keep how bad the amazon book really is a secret..

I am happy to have purchased it since I can have it on my iPad, even though I despise the part 3 content.

You should finish this. It's pretty exceptional.

WOW!!!

You must continue with this saga....I love every aspect of this story.....I would love to co-write another 50 chapters with you......at no cost to you. Thank you.

loved the story....seemed a bit rushed at the end but thats only my opinion....cant wait for more!!!!!

it's already for sale on amazon under the name "Voyage" by C Paul Lockman

http://www.amazon.com/Voyage-ebook/dp/B005HIT2OA/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1329557865&sr=8-1

I have spent the last 2 days reading this story and it is absolutely amazing, the sex is great but the storyline WOW!!! I can't get enough of it please please keep writing. Its kind of funny I never would have thought that I'd find the next great science fiction novel on an erotica site. Lol keep the good stuff coming.

Incredible! The sex is nice, but the story is amazing! Love the character, the science, the values represented. What imagination!

Just the most amazing story ever...Was sad when it came to an end

Great story buddy. Really loved the details on the science stuff , didn't expect such precise account on the space and other things. I just can't wait for the next part!

Fantastic story so far Farmerboy. I truly enjoyed readings all 40 pages and I can not wait for your next installment. Keep up the great work!

Wonderful yarn!!!! Hopefully the next installment will be coming really soon. Can't wait!!!! Wonderfully written!!

i loved reading this, and in fact i am just reading it again, i would love if you would consider continuing this novela!!!!

five stars, no question about it. don't get me wrong, I loved the story, However, here's some (hopefully) constructive criticism. I realise that this story is already a couple of years old, but in case you intend to finish it, maybe this helps :)

- the bloody protagonist has no name !!! Or did I just miss it? I doubt it. it was my personal "running gag" while reading. I waited for 40 pages for it to pop up, hoped that you'd save it until the end (only to find there was no proper end :) ).

- At some point the protagonist debates whether his relationship with Gemma is ok. He then concludes that he can't really return to Falik, because she'd be 80 years older once he'd get there. (Which is wrong, she'd only be 40 years older). But: I'm sorry, hello? The guy has an IQ of over 2000 now, his gf (Falik) is just as smart, he travelled through time for god's sake and promised to come back. But he only figured out that she'd be old by the time he'd get back once he has actually left? Surely this topic should have come up earlier.

- On that note. Age shouldn't be a problem? I remember reading that the Takanlian (?) population does hardly age and long life spans are very common due to their genetic modifications.

- I don't like time travel, because it seriously f***s up logics. Let's think it through. The protagonist is still abducted, but this around time he won't see a need to return to Earth because he himself will have fixed all the problems. But the abducted version (who won't return to Earth) will still become the boyfriend of Falik. Hence there is no point for the version who fixed the Earth's problems to return to Takanli, because his spot in Falik's bed will already be occupied (by his other version). Personally, I therefore would either shorten the distance or increase the travel speed, but leave time travel out of the story - or you'll have to do A LOT of thinking and "story designing" to make it fit.

- If I remember correctly, he found a red cube at the abduction site. Why would the Takanli leave a red cube? They don't know themselves that they had sent him back in time yet. Also, that cube is never mentioned again.

- Why doesn't Falik join him on his jurney? Apparently she looks perfectly human, and it should be simple to forge her an identity (Hal forged a bunch of fake identities for the protagonist just like that).

- Why is he allowed to leave in general? Okay, he's fixed the outer rim situation, but the Takanli still don't have what they actually abducted him for - a drug to get some emotions.

- Again on that note. I found it a bit odd that a population which has no emotions is into sex THAT much :) After all, sex is a relatively emotional thing. Maybe it would be funnier if he had to seduce some Takanli women into having sex with him (and then they'd find that sex with him is entirely different than with other Takanlis, so he can still become the sexual celebrity), rather than he is just offered sex left and right from the beginning.

- some of your figures are wrong / funny. call me nerdy but this bothered me. E.g. Jupiter is at most 6.2AU (9*10^8 km) away from the earth (if it's exactly on the other side of the sun from the earth, the average distance is much shorter). The cruiser with 0.7c or something should get there within two hours tops (even keeping a reasonable distance to the sun, presuming it has to fly by there), not twelve hours. Also, Europa has about 65% of the mass of the earth, ergo it should have about 0.65-G, not one sixth. I remember the figures you mentioned in that part when he re-entered our solar system to be funny as well.

Ok, that's gotta be the longest comment ever :) take care!

Go check out his book on amazon, I downloaded mine through kindle and onto my iPod!

Go to the authors biography section on here and you'll find out that his book is called "Voyage"

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When u planning to complete the story??? :D

Loved it.

Excellent read, want to see how it finishes.

Wonderful stuff. All pretty much up to date too. Slight worry is that, with the rate of development of all these things, the story could quickly go out of date. I think of the film 2001 (my favourite), by & large it's still valid even today. PANAM's disappeared and he didn't foresee little handheld mobile phones either. Look forward to the published story. Maybe a movie later? :-)

amazing. you should get this published.

with it now labeled as finished and available on the sites stated in your profile, does it mean that you no longer are planning on finishing it here?

Would love to know, Thanks.

By all means, continue your story.

This was by far the best read on here I've found, both in story arc and cantstopreadingability. I want to critique for a couple typos and maybe some slight repeating in the hotter scenes, but got off 7 times (long weekend without to be fair). You'd have to find a beta that's a eunuch or something. Will download your ebook to the tablet when it's released.

Good news! The final version of 'Alien Impulses' is ready, stands at 190,000 words, and is in preparation for publishing on Smashwords and Amazon.

It has been re-titled 'Voyage' and is envisioned as the first book in a sci-fi erotica series.

Thanks for the emails and comments. I will reply to everyone who has contacted me once the book is uploaded and ready to read. Do let me know if you'd like to be included on the mailing list.

It's exciting to be at the end of this project, but even more exciting to know it's just the beginning!

Yours,

C P Lockman

farmerboyauthor@gmail.com

Seriously. Please continue. This Story is amazing.

There has been many sessions of fapping and many more sessions of reading this sci-fi with no desire to fap but in the end all there is left to say is one word; More????

Hope that there will be more!

.... but I never stopped reading until the end.