All Comments on 'All of Us'

You made me hard... you're a very sexy lady, you know that? And I like your pic. :-)

Please, accept that I really liked your story, and you have real talent as a narrator. Don't be hurt by the advice I offer, because I'm doing it so you'll write some more and let me read what's in that lovely head of yours.

Only suggestion at this point - give us more detail on what your character is feeling physically. Can she SMELL who's touching her? Master's musk or sister's?

And when someone's lips touch your character, is it just to kiss, or does the person suck her skin, her nipp;es, her hood, her clit, her pussy?

How is the contact made? Fiercely? passionately? roughly? lovingly? What does your character HEAR while she's being teased and fucked?

Zoom in with more detail... can your character feel someone else's bare skin on her as she's being tasted and felt up?

Please, give us more!

Just wished it was longer hon

sis, smiles, i was done in the first few paragraphs,sigh where is my toy box

Your stories are so full of that respect to each and every one in them. An other thing you made me understand, being a sub doesn't mean just pleasing the Master, it also means, being pleased as a sub. have a Master that take care of your needs. It is beautiful and gives anybody the taste to be sub, at least, once!

stimulates all of the senses.

Great Story. Replied to a post you had on the forums and then saw that you were an author. Very nice indeed! I'm taking notes from you to improve my own writing.

This was really good. I cannot believe I haven't read it before, what was I thinking? Thank you for sharing with all of us, and keep it up!

Wow Kayte, i love it and love how simple yet erotic it is kept -- when you going to do more??