All Comments on 'Enchanted Ch. 15'

An excellent story. i liked the characters and the story line. I look forward to reading your next adventure. Thanks for your time and your imagination.

in over 50 years.

Something I'd recommend is work on using more commas in your sentences. They play an important role in pacing, and rythym in writing. You have a tendency to not include commas at the end and beginning of sentences, where appropriate. For example, when a sentence ends with 'too', &/or when a sentence begins with a single or phrase, which modifies the main portion of the sentence, as in,

End of sentence:

'John struggled over the high rail, as he got into the long boat. Sasha struggled, too. She had an excuse, though, as she was much shorter.'

Beginning of sentence:

'Exhausted, Steff headed straight for the hammock.'

When the comma is missing, the sentence kinda blows through the modifying word(s), and their impact is minimized.

Thanks for sharing, I look forward to warlock.

GeoD

Man, I love this story. I came because I’m a fan of warlocks, stayed for the big titty shortstack, but now you’re breaking my heart chapter after chapter and I’m here for it. Thanks for the story and keep on keepin on.

Decent enough story. Could use some better editing to catch missing or extraneous words, unless they were intentional.

Getting ready to start in on book 2 now after binging this one, and I'm not quite sure where you plan on taking this story or what other plans you have, but if I might toss an idea your way? Since Little Red gave over her soul willingly, could it be possible for Mistress to resurrect her in a new form and place her at John's side to assist and serve him? John could do well with some loyal followers who know the score and have no qualms with making ends meet, so to speak.

Anyways, moving on now. I'll probably chime in again later once I've caught up.

im sad to see it go, cant wait for part 2 to be complete, i cant really do the whole waiting weeks to months in between chapters, especially when its this good, you sir have some great writing chops, just needs refinement through experience, please keep it up!

I came for the wank, stayed for the story, there is no greater praise for erotica than tis.

I enjoyed this story it has a little of everything. Noble ladies seeking discretion sound better than Knot holes

A great yarn filled with derring do, lovely sexy bits and winning characters. Some lapses in word use and incorrect use or missing words are an annoyance in an otherwise enjoyable story. Well done.

Loved it. Keep it up

Thank you for this tale...it was Enchanting

Very well done, couldn’t put it down. Definitely looking forward to Warlock.