by AbbeFaria
Overall, good story. It ended poorly, imo, but it was fairly engaging throughout. I only regret that there wasn't much character development as our protagonist went from one scene to the next without much in the way of answers or explanations. Definitely a fun read and something that'll make you think. It needs another hundred chapters, though.
you could have at least finished the s3x scene before Kristel's nightmare scene. I mean, this is an erotic story site.
and yeah, clean up the spelling and grammar dude. you're using speech to text aren't you?
Why did you lie?
You said this was a complete series
I really hate that and liars
Except for all the spelling mistakes. That detracts quite a bit from the story.
Wonderfully done and very well written! If you ever come back, please continue this amazing story! Thank you!
You have a really good story going her, but (and this is a bit of my hang-up more than yours) then/than, please learn the difference.
It is a shame that this story was never finished. It left us or at least me wanting to know how he would solve his dilemma. Perhaps some other author to pick up the story and continue
He wrote ch. 10 over a decade ago. I think it's safe to assume that the story will never be finished by him.
Don't leave me hanging plus I need another chapter it's like crack!! :)
Good to know I'm not the only one who came back to check on this story like 10 years later. Bruh. You're worse than George Martin lol
Don't know what's keeping you from writing more... Want to know what happened.
I am enjoying your talent and waiting impatiently for your next effort.
With 15 pages written, you could have given us chapters 11, 12 and 13 of 5 pages each.... what on earth are you waiting for???
I've had writers block for a year now myself. Cut Abbe some slack people! try writing a couple chapters from your imagination and see what I mean. Personally I'm willing to wait for the next offerings!
Thanks
Jack
Can you post what you currently have of Ch. 11? I remember reading this almost 10 years ago, and coming back now to see if it was finished. I don't want to forget about it again. It is a great story and I want to see what will happen.
Why invest so much of your time then never finish the story? Writers block? You suck.
drinking cum too. He sucks everything. I gave you a5 for your story
Like I said, you'll never finish this, RIGHT? My only question is WHY?
I love this story but will you ever finish it? I've written to you but I heard nothing back.
This is such a great story, I would have bought this book and every one that followed, that I hoped was going to be a long series!
O.K., don't get me wrong I LOVED this story, but have you noticed that most if not all really good long stories just stop, like all the authors just disappeared off the face of the planet? It's just sad really.
The most gripping of all the Mind Control stories i have ever read. too bad tha there are no new postings from 2006. please be back again.....
the story was going on nicely, why did you have to stop it. continue the story dude, you were doing a nice job
...you actually working on finishing it, or just coming back every few years to say "I'll work on it."?
Because it's pretty good stuff, save for how sometimes half the page ends up italicized...and how it's not finished. -_-
Okay, AbbeFaria, it has been a year now since your last assurance in these comments that you would finish this story. I would think that it's about time for another status update about the progress of the story, or just to let us know you're still alive.
So, how about it? Are we going to get another assurance that you're gonna finish this story or are you actually going to post the next chapter?
By the way, the website you have linked to your profile here is long since gone. Do you have a second option on where we can go to hopefully find something that you keep up to date?
Now that is a brilliant story that I just read in one sitting. Like a previous commenter said, this is too good a story to stop now. Please continue.
A very good story. Please don't leave it there, there are to many unsolved problems. Don't give me the female version of blue balls!!!!!! Finish it and tie up all the loose ends!!!
No leave it there thats a good stopping point. you don't need a ending.
in the Green Mile, the boss is Paul Edgecomb and the big black guy is John Coffey
Ive been reading for a week to find out you havent written anymore in 6 years. We are dying to know what happens. Especially those of us from phoenix. Love the bars on mill street and its nice to connect geologically to a story.
Please hurry I've read them all and need to continue! It's killing me lol
I must say I just found this meant to read it ages ago... but I read the entirety and would see it continued as well a very good story.
I just read all the chapters and I can't wait for the rest of the story: just one thing, I want it to be all tied up with his winning the battle within himself and the battle with the Gods. Any other type of ending would be untenable.
thanks
I've heard your cries. I will indeed attempt to get this story finished. It's been a long time but I think the rest of Stephen's story is ready to be told. Wish me luck.
-Abbefaria
yes please finish it i know how much time writing good stories can take but please come back
I realize that you have moved on, but many of us would like to see Steve's story work out one way or another. Please think about writing something to give us some closure.
you suck to leave us wondering how it will end, finish it.....................
U should continue! I'm,pardon the pun,dying to know how he deals with his dark and evil persona! Its a shame that we'll never know! By the way,great job to a great story!
That was brilliant!
Guessing there wont be anymore now since it's been such a long time, that'a a dreadful shame, as I was dying to find out how it ends!
Still, a great story nonetheless.
Thanks!
I hope you'll continue this. You have a rare gift for character development and a firm grasp of the mythology, and you spin the tale well.
its awesome. but you're keeping the rest from us. like withdrawing just on the brink of an orgasm. finish it dude. asap. we're all waiting.. i esp love the mythological angle.. i wish aphrodite would fuck him. :)
Writers that spend 2 yrs. putting together a very good story. I enjoy a well written, longer story like you've put together. However, I expect a story to be completed. Since it's been 5 years that your last chapter ended, I doubt there will be anymore. That not fair. I wasted alot of time following the story and giving it mostly 5 stars.
Very nice story, good to see the one given such power actually struggling to stop himself from going too far..
its a good storey your cariters were all well thout out even the lesser ones wich gives the store an almost real vibe. keep it up.
LOVE IT. Whats going to happen with the omelette, thats what we all want to know....
Waiting for more - hopefully you will come back and write more - PLEASE!
This is the best story I have ever read, including non-sexual ones. I think you should keep the series going. Also, just putting it out there, it would be nice if you queried your audience for suggestions. I've seen that work wonders on both writing speed and ratings.
Yours truly,
¥3n
This is a good story with a well developed plot and characters that show signs of development. Keep up the good work and think about publishing to print or ebook format.
Add me to the list of those thankful for your efforts and hoping for more. This story is truly a Gift From A Talented Author.
Thank You!!
I have to say that this is one of the best stories I have read on this site. It would be a great shame for you to not finish it, im looking forward to an ending. This story also makes me wonder how I would fare with those kinds of powers... heh. Who knows eh?
You've done a great job with plot and characters and I really enjoyed a lot of the narrator's sardonic side-thoughts. If this were a printed book you could leave the story here - it pretty much stands alone, we know a lot about Steve's situation and can guess much of what he will have to go through. The readers have imaginations; you could leave it to them. Maybe a sequel which also stands alone?
(You need to watch your homonyms and a tendency to use "to much" instead of "too much".) Good work, please keep 'em coming!
Ok well I've been waiting for the next chapter to this for quite a while now and it's not looking so good. Any idea when you will begin working on this story again?
Come on man, you have SO got to continue this. I just spent six hours trying to remember what it was called to find it again, only to find that only one new chapter had been added in the ages since I last read it! This is one of the best erotic fiction stories I've ever read, you HAVE to finish it!
you're not continueing? all that build up to a great internal battle between himself and, as you put it, HIM. not even talking about the gods. if you didn't continue it would be a shame. you've got an amazing story here. i hope that'll inspire you enough to continue, i know i'll be looking for chapter 11.
I wish I did not even spend the time to read this. The story was amazing, but thats just it you didn't finish. I just have to say wow it really is a shame all thats plot development all spoiled.
Your telling is very good even without the graphic sex. Please continue.
....A great read thus far!!! I hope you very much decise
To continue this story....
... AbbeFaria is planning to finish this excellent story. It would be a real
shame to leave it and us just hanging....
Can I have a hotdog ? We're out of mustard...damn !!
Come on AbbeFaria...FEED ME !!
FYI - I really enjoyed the "first part" of your story...more please. Tanks !
This was a great read and I would love to read the ending. I would guess that there are another 10-15 chapters if not several more books that could be written. I hope that you read these comments and realize that it is a piece worth finishing.
you should really finish it. no good story is complete without a filling conclusion. Almost like District 9 if you seen the movie you know what I'm talking about.
But thanks for the story
Dear Author,
I Cannot Stress Enough the importance of the conclusion to this story, as a obviously well educated author, finishing this work of art will not only place your ever-so-die-hard-loyal fans curiosity to rest but give you a great sense of accomplishment and joy. As any well rated author might tell you. On a lighter note, very good job, we'll be in touch. (communication, touch might not be the most proper term to use considering the nature of this website)
Anxious To Hear More,
Viking
Are You going to finish this Story its right there and just waiting to be Finished. Aphrodite,Hermes,or Zeus should be coming into the Picture
Curt
Excellent story, I remember reading this some time ago, shortly after its initial posting and wondering when it would bother to be finished. I am happy to see the comment from the author as I can now hold out some hope to a great resolution to one of the best stories on Lit. Keep writing and I will remain a loyal fan. Until then I remain...
Great storyline! Tbh, I stopped reading the erotic bits (although they were damn hot) cos it's 3 am here and I really wanted to sleep...but the story kept me hooked. A real pleasure to read something that has this much finesse. Glad to hear that you plan to carry on. Also, loved the Oxford reference. Local interest is always a plus...x
The story was great but Literotica really needs to do something about all these great stories that are never finished
Sir you have held/ hold countless lives in your story we are all on tender hooks for a finish or a thousand more chapters please release us with your words
I know it's been...a long time since I've updated and, for those that read this, I felt that I owed it to you to say something. I sincerely apologize to all of you who read this, enjoyed it and were left without a resolution. I will make every attempt to get the story finished and posted. When? I don't know. But I do intend to begin again after just realizing that the beginnings of the final chapter were lost, so that immediately improves the chances that you'll see it sooner rather than later.
why Literotica should change their rules of submission. There are numerous stories on this site and SOL that never were finished for some reason or other.<p> The sad part is most of these stories were very good, but the author left the readers hanging. Stories should not be accepted by this site or any other unless they are submitted in its entirety.<p> This way the readers can finish a story at their own pace and not have to wait weeks for each chapter to be posted, or worse, as in this case, not finished.
please i and everyone else begs you to finish it,
the legend i mean,
how does it end.
does he win over himself ,
tell us please i have read an reread your legend.thank you so much
Writing one of the best stories on the site and then leaving all of us hanging. Try to work around whats hopefully just a writers block and not a death sentence for this novel pretending to be a story.
My friend....i honestly just spent the last 5 hrs of my life reading through the last 5 chapters of your story...it's now 6am but i just couldn't tear myself away....but the ending....it's absolutely torturous....really..this could be turned into a legitimate novel....and i even dare to hope that one day it might be pulished as such, but I must know....are there any other chapters in the making??? Really, truly, spectacular work. I applaud you and sincerely hope to see more in the near future =).
I cant believe you've stopped! Please continue, i literally have the link to this story saved in my file as "The Best Story Evah!" Really! You, my fine friend, are an author to compare to anne Mccaffery, AE von vogt, and Hubbard. Astounding.
You can't just leave us hanging like that, you have to finish this.coming to the end of this gave me that same sad feeling you get when you come to the end of an amazing book.
Fantastic work. I wonder if u have ever considered it being published in full from a company?
I think u have the creativity to be a great professional author if you are not already.
It would seem that the author has a gift of sorts too, to transport the reader into a detailed and engrossing world. More writing forthcoming would always be appreciated and met with enormous thanks (especially after the non-ending and silghtly anti-climactic finale). I'm saddend though that there may never be any more additions to this saga, as the last installment was written in 2006, I think we can all agree that it's a sad day when a fine piece of writing such as this comes to an end.
damn you really hit me with this story! all of it rings so closely with me, it's like you read my mind (lol) but seriously best work on this site by far! please please keep writing! i know it must be anoying to have people ask you again and again to but this story is just tooooooooo cooooool!!!
This was the first and best actual erotic story, I have ever read. Whoever you are I sincerely hope you are going to write some more, 'cause you've gotten me addicted!