All Comments on 'Piccadilly Line'

sorry but my daily experience of the Pic is the exact opposite of "sweat releases perfume", more so than ever at this time of year. which kind of spoils my potential enjoyment of your story. sorry but i just can't get past that. it's a nice idea though...

but i do agree with you about leaking ipods - boof dish boof dish - good grief, don't you people have even a *shred* of imagination? lol

try again hnn but next time choose another line, hmm?

;-)

this guy better call her! awesome imagery. and plenty of adjectives to throw around :) very well written

I think a better ending would've been you reaching into your pocket to discover the little minx had taken your wallet :-)

I only wish my daily commute involved a little more gyrating.

Brilliant - the heat, tension and suspense made for an extremely titillating read

Very nice fantasy, which I can identify with... so what happens next?

I've had a similar story floating about in my head for a while, although mine takes place during winter, but the same basic crowded-tube idea. I like what you've done with this, it's good and simple and plausible.

One small point though: isn't 'smelt' something done in iron working?

I was waiting for it to end with "And that was the last I saw of my wallet."