All Comments on 'The Invite'

Matchmaking in a whole new setting.

I really liked that as a sort of last surprise.

For a moment you had me wondering if Venus was the goddess herself.

Good luck.

No, a story needs a middle and and end.

This would be a good story to continue.

Would make an interesting series. "My wife, the vampire ". *****

I thought Venus was the actual goddess at first!!!

I liked the story but it feels incomplete. It has several aspects that need more clarification: i) Venus and JIm - it states he is special but does not elaborate what is special about him and since he knows that Venus is not quite human how will he react when he realises that she is a vampire: ii) Who is Bob and what is his relationship to Venus and how will Jim deal with Bob once he realises he was setup by him to be a donor for his family. The story conveniently finishes at the start of Jim's journey but it is fraught with problems and roadblocks that could derail Bob's careful planning and manipulation. I would love to see how you would resolve these issues. With more development i would give it 5* but as it is now to me it is only a 4* story.