by Phineas
My 2 cents
I love this story and story line. I hope your mind continues to spew forth more of this story. Thanks for your time and your imagination.
Well done... I'm curious to find out about Jennaca's resistance/compatibility with John. Sounds like she could be a keeper.
I find the characters in this story so interesting and you made them so varied and unique. Even though John is a demon or part demon, I am hoping he finds a way to replace Corsas tongue. That is something I have never read in a story and I can imagine that the things she would like to say would be very interesting and possibly helpful at some point. This story continues to be everything I could hope for and more since it is so different than the usual AD&D/old timey tales and having an infernal as the leader even more so considering he isn’t your typical cruel leader type demon.
I’d really like to have 3-4 page chapters. I’d wait longer but 1.5 pages is just too short for a chapter. Personal opinion.