- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Corridor
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Click hereQuiet,
Compliant,
Completely defiant
I walk down the hall
To the cell
I call home.
The doors I walk past
Are closed shut,
And locked tight;
Beyond are the wandering souls
Of my friends.
Listless
And lonesome
We all treasure quiet
And fear for the time
They take that away.
Helpless,
Alone,
We dream
Only of
Home...
And pray for the means
To return there,
Someday.
- COMMENTS
DeepAsleepover 19 years agoGlad to see you decided to start submitting here on Lit.
Enjoyed this poem, though I think there were a couple minor editing issues you might not have considered - a couple places where your grammar suffered a bit, a couple redundancies. However! It's a strong poem, bleak and ascetic in a way that emphasizes the tone of the poem.
Good job, hope to see more of your stuff, chief.
~D.A.
flyguy69over 19 years agoSparse wording reinforces the bleakness of the setting. Very well done.
