tagErotic StoriesBDSMRecent Commets

BDSM Feedback Portal

Load newRequesting new commentsRequesting new commentsNo new comments, try later

Latest 15 Reader Comments

Interesting start of a larger tale

Interesting start of a larger tale.

No spelling errors, strictly speaking, in the sense that this tale would pass (and probably has passed) an automated spell-check, but there's a difference between to, too, and two, even though they all sound the same. You often use a wrong word in place of a similarly sounding correct word and it's an uncommon app that can detect these errors.
Seriously, you need a to find someone, a human, to proof read your stuff.

When writing a tale such as this one, one that's built on a foundation of kidnapping and non-consensual abuse, you're eventually going to have to come face-to face with a grim reality: she must never go free and will have to die in captivity; if she ever gets loose, there's hardly a jurisdiction anywhere that wouldn't give the 'farmers' life sentences without parole. You're eventually going to have to snuff her because the farmers will have no choice.
Suggestion: put a pig sty somewhere on the dairy farm in order to permanently -- and completely -- dispose of your worn-out livestock.

Three stars -- woulda been four otherwise.

NO

No, no annnnnd no.
If you truely think this is how a Daddy/little relationship works then you need to refresh your knowledge. Having an anal fetish is fine, being into DD/lg is fine, liking it a bit rough is fine. Creating an abusively hideous interlude is not fine. If you found someone to treat you like this, and you wanted him to treat you like this, good for y'all for saving two others from your crazy.

Great Story

Great story, eagerly awaiting more chapters.

My word. I feel your wife didn't take you out to the woodshed I will! Truly a spectacular and heartrending piece of writing. You are very talented.

The answer

The answer is yes daddy, just so you can punish me how you please.

I can't wait to read your next story.

Oh my!

An auother after my own heart, I share my companion with my two best friends sometimes much to female part of the duos delight

????????????

no plot . no story line . no real beginning . no conclusion . just a string of old cliches .

Gross. Take this story down

No story should ever say little girl or baby girl or young girl that has to do with any sexual activity. This story needs to be reported to the proper authorities and taken down . Just plain gross

Very intense. Thank you for sharing this story.
-Sir'sblushingbuttslut

Deep!

But a good message, well done!

Lord Black?

Another name for jackass.

Re dickish behavior and prior communication

Daddy's efforts to embarass her in public, especially pinching her when she was about to order, was not dominant behavior. It was silly, immature and what I'd expect from a teenager.
The last comment described the extensive communication that took place before their similar real life experience. Given the endless parade of abusive dreck posted on Lit, I've reached the point of feeling if it isn't included in the story then it didn't happen. Making clear things like relationship history, consent, safe mechanisms does not need to take huge amounts of space in a story. When these things are spread out and folded into a story using only a few well chosen words, they do NOT distract from the hotsexy action. Including these things as a part of what is happening via thoughts, dialogue, descriptions of reactions BUILDS the story. It also frees the reader from concerns and allows them to fully immerse themselves in the hotsexy.
To me, the single most intimate moment of this interlude was when Daddy leaned close and told her she could stop it all with a shake of her head. THAT provided the most information about them, and it was one single sentence tossed in the middle of the sucking and fucking. She didn't stop things. Okay, was that because she really had wanted this, wanted it when in a clear mind? Did she agree because of the magical arousal of the moment that might fade to regret after? Did she refuse to refuse what Daddy wants no matter what her feelings may be, as is too often portrayed?
Daddy and little cuddled and loved after. Wonderful. I'm still left wondering about too many things. Things that had they been included would have made this a grand slam.

Touching the primal sexgod inside

Thank you, Sir! This is such a fine piece of art. Your writing is so full of heart and soul, you seem to think about writing BDSM-stories just like your character Conner D. does. No simple repitition of the typical nasty phrases here, not just another short-story to jerk off to, but something that succeeded in touching something in me, that made me felt understood. Keep the good work up, can't wait to read more of this inspiring stuff. Greetings from Germany, TopDomKrizzly. Thumbs up!

Forgot your password?

Please wait

Change picture

Your current user avatar, all sizes:

Default size User Picture  Medium size User Picture  Small size User Picture  Tiny size User Picture

You have a new user avatar waiting for moderation.

Select new user avatar:

   Cancel