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SURPRISE!

I'm used to JPB stories just stopping with no finish or resolution, leaving me hanging and frustrated. I read this one only to see how someone else would finish it. Surprise! JPB finished it! And an intriguing finish it was with interest-holding, unexpected twists and turns. In fact, the end was a thunk-the-forehead moment: he takes her back knowing she's currently cheating, when he initially rejected her when she was not actually cheating?!?!?! I guess these weird unexpected twists make it more interesting.
Still not finished. What happens with their last attempt? And the daughters?
Paul in Oklahoma

Well

at first I thought it was going to be realville. Then it went mission impossible on us. Enjoyed it though. Guess I'll search for other versions.

Anon1/1

Interesting story. Relevance to this story?

For myself, any sex while we were separated would have been no problem. Sex or even an emotional affair with the lawyer after she moved back into my bed would have been a deal killer. Wouldn't have happened though in the first place. To all you young single men, if she runs with a motorcycle gang or some other bad boy, don't consider her as wife material unless you are an even badder boy. If she drinks more, does more drugs than you, etc f her if you must but don't let her in your heart or house.

Loved it!

Awesome but also a bitter sweet ending love the overall story build up and characters. Probably the best pair of twins I've read in any story on here thus far.

uh

this is really good, and i enjoy your stories but there are some myth errors! Zeus is the youngest of the original Olympians, Demeter is older than Poseidon, Aphrodite is Demeter's niece (but sister if you're going by the sea-foam version of her myth). And Helios is a titan, so not Zeus's child, that would be Apollo who later became known as a sun god for his nickname "lord of light" which was supposed to mean (in context) that he was a truth god/god of prophecy (among other things). As for the Zeus/Demeter relations, Demeter was Zeus's first wife, he later married Hera, so Persephone is safe (for the most part) from Hera's wrath. This got long, I'm sorry, it's just little things like that just upset me ;.;'

Too Long. Too much of a fantasy. I realize that people do things because "they can" but that is not an excuse for stupidity. I also realize that, once a break occurs, it should be irrevocable.

Other than that: well written but too long.

An odd story.

I think I understand the concept of this writer's challenge. And I liked the way this was written from a technical standpoint. But it really felt like the middle chapter of a book. We need to know more about these people. Their history. Those would be the beginning chapters of the book. Then we need to know how he played the "Game". Did he go looking for her or did he rent a nice beach house, do some writing of his own and wait for his wife to come find HIM! That would be a good twist to their game. The closing chapters of the book would detail how their lives were effected by the "Game" and what happened to them. Overall, this was just frustrating. This is the kind of story wherein I really miss FTDS.

Not for the faint of heart

Not for the unintelligent who cannot discern between hopeful fiction and abiding anger. I liked it.

Please do continue ...

Such a fun story and great characters.

O.M.G. !!!!!!!!

This was excellent !!!!!!! Ignore the negative comments. I loved it. Thank you so much . You did a fantastic job with this story.

Nice, very nice.

A very touching story. It is a rare find on Lit, but once in a blue moon one like it pops up that can really grab the reader.

Liked it.

Taken in total this was a we'll written, entertaining, and enjoyable yarn.

Sucked Big Time

Hated the story. He turned into what he hated the most. A FRIGGIN CHEATER!!!

NFW!

I would of used the so called, "safe word" as-soon-as she started to restrain me. Gotten a couple of suitcases, and packed my bags and left....let her try and figure out why..

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