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Best of yours that I have read so far 5*

I like reconciliation as long as it is done in a believable way and the husband does not turn into an absolute wimp. The narrative and dialogue are well written, well done. Will read more of yours.

Hilarious! Fun read.

Morons.

Half the fun of short stories is the lack of an ending. Enjoy the ride you fools. The Author gave you as much as he wanted you to have. This is his story, not yours.

nice!

Would have loved to hear more about after the ship!!

Perhaps the best of the really good ones here on Lit.

I loved it. It was great in every respect (except the proofreading, of course). The how-to's—how to kiss and rules for good sex—were especially well thought out. My first reaction when I finished was, "That's the best story I've read on Lit (out of about 200). I wish I’d read it when I was in high school—it might have made me appreciate my family and help pull it together instead of contributing to its fracturing.” Thank you TTT.

The few negative comments made me laugh, even as they stumped me. I mean, there's no chance to leave comments until the end of the NINTH page. Did you actually read nine long pages you didn't like, just to be able to leave a comment? Regardless of which category a story is assigned to, it was pretty clear by the first or second page that this one was about incest.

Don't like incest?—go find another story in a category you know you like. But don't disparage an outstanding story because you don't like stories about the topic. They’re not here for you—there're here for those of us who find incest to be erotic.

Don’t like the length? Then make a habit of finding out the length before you read a single word. It’s shown at the bottom of every page, on the next line after the author’s user name. Pretty easy to find.

@must have read a different story: I agree, you must have. You read the story just three weeks before me. The aggregate rating is now 4.81, so it must have been close to that when you read it. That high a rating for the first or only chapter of a story is rare here at Lit. That should tell you that the problem is most likely not with the story, but with your reading of it.

@TTT: Thanks again for all the work you put into this story, and for sharing the fruits of your labor with us. I hope you’re able to slough off the unhelpful comments.

Barry

Well written but not exactly my cup of tea.

I wouldn't want to be tied down by anyone, even my wife whom I mostly trust. Wouldn't want to be blindfolded and certainly would have had some second thoughts when the wife said get everything clean and then hoisted my ass up into the air. At this point the odds would have been more in favor of her having brought in another man and the tied up husband getting ass fucked all night long for her edification. As it is that ribbed thing that went up his ass could have been a dick with a ribbed condom on it. Not such an exciting night that. As to the wife and her friend playing with each other, not such a good sharing night there either. Seems like the night was at his expense for her. There would be some really deep conversations if that were my house. Probably be some umbilical blood draws for a quickie paternity test. She's 2 months pregnant and this is the first he hears about it? Seriously?

Well, as you can see I was less than impressed with this story. I read it all the way through, it was a good read. Just like I said, not my cup of tea.

finally a real story

the "why" she did it is clear enough, still for those who skimmed, she did it because her identity was lost hence she wanted to have an affair.
but finally i got a real reason rather a please forgive me am sorry, may not reduce the hurt but atleast its honest & logical.

love

I thought this story was absolutely gorgeous. Good pacing, built up from a slow beginning, I thought that the was story about Heracles and Omphale would be absolutely gorgeous (and it was). I love things that subvert or reverse things, and I can just imagine a gorgeous queen dominating the big strong hero. There was a gentleness to everything that I really enjoyed; the dialogue, the pacing, the sex, all seemed very gentle, very tender. Wish the story had more likes, it was excellent.

Just another unfinished piece of trash

That the author couldn't be bothered to finish.

I must have read a different story

With thoroughly disgusting characters what was to like in this mess? UGH!

Unexpected development, but interesting and compelling story

I don't know why, but as I reflect upon this story, it reminds me of "A Portrait of an Artist as a Young Man". I'm guessing the narrator reminds me of Stephen Dedalus and the conflict he felt until he makes his decision to follow his aesthetic ambitions and become his own man.

And I like the fact that Cynthia did not turn out to be a love interest, which is the predictable path most writers would have taken. I enjoyed Cynthia's lesson on developing the artist's inspiration and using that to create the painting - true for writing as well.

Memorable and well done!

luv2read2

KarenE

Although I appreciate and respect KarenE's comments in most cases, she is dead wrong on this one. Not her fault, she simply is incapable of looking at it through the prism of being a Dad. NOTE: being a DAD is completely different than being a sire.

When I met my second wife, she came with a darling little 9-year old girl. Girl is now 21, and is in the middle of her Jr year of college, and is drop-dead gorgeous. (True in fact as well as through my biased eyes). If she ever tried anything like this story, I would also reject her, because she IS my daughter, no matter what the DNA says.

great start

But now sadly abandoned?
I hate when a good writer does that.

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