. . . exactly, bageltiger. Though, considering how the author tend to ignore comments and questions my guess is we only get a answers once he post it. Hopefully not under a different handle.
I wish there was more in the sex scene. Two thirds of the story was working up to this moment and now that it's there, it lacked the luster the rest of the story did. More details in this sex scene. Overall, the story before the sex wasn't worth reading. 4/10
Loved the story! I'd really like to see a follow-up to this, with the young lady returning to Brown. Perhaps after having learned some of "their language" and actually communicating with him. Just a thought.
I want a sequel please
the thing is....will they ever believe what really happened......a great bit of fun....
Like the title says. You wrote a good story, worth a four or even five star rating, but your spelling is so painfully bad, that drops it down to only one star.
There's no excuse these days for bad spelling, given how many apps there are, for any platform, that make correcting mistakes extremely easy.
A beautiful dark tale. I could not stop reading. My heart swelled with joy and broke with sadness. Truely epic. I will be saving this to reflect on for a very long time. Not often Erotic literature makes you giggle and cry. Great work. I look forward to seeing more from your mind.
The plot,there was'nt one 'it was just sex and it even gets borring .It was a frightfull read
One of the only stories posted up here that is actually disturbing to the point of scary. Not too sure about erotic as sex were rather a small and minimal theme.
Will you ever post a uncensored version of this offsite.
What a great story! This is far beyond what I would expect to find on a website. I re ad this in a single sitting. It was compelling. Consider going back in, expanding the characters, adding some backstory. I think this really could be a good full-length novel. Well done!
The comments don't do this story justice. Call me a baby, but I actually cried at the end and in the middle. This was so beautifully written and so emotional and so amazing. Such a wonderful idea for a story and I am so glad I came across it. Please continue to write and I even encourage you to write a book. Just from reading this, I would buy any novel you wrote, hands down. Please never stop writing!
I dunno about anyone else, but I'd love to read more stories like this. You have such a wonderful way with words!
... and I liked your take on Vampire subculture. 5 stars from me.
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