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Vivid and Calculated Scenes of Mayhem and $laughter

I'm not a soldier but after this author breaks down the confrontations and deadly skirmishes , I feel like Tecumseh and Napoleon at their zenith of ingenuity. Full marks! *****

started out well

but now it is just endless sex scenes and your leading character has no morals. boring and disappointing. Oh and your editing skills are poor. so many random commas and incorrectly used words. I am done.

Philip

Another great chapter...

Thankyou for another great chapter. This one fills in a gap.

Love the story

Outstanding work! Thank you.

hooked

I have seemingly fallen in love with your characters, and I cannot wait to read more!

One of the best!

Thanks! One of the best things I have read here.

Another Great Chapter. ..

Thankyou for another great chapter. I thoroughly enjoyed it and look forward to reading more. Easily worth 5 stars.

GOOD STORY!

You write a very good story, I wait for a new chapter every month. I'm sorry to hear about your health problems. I hope everything goes as planed and that your back to writing as soon as you can. GOOD LUCK!

NEVER COUNT THOSE CHICKENS IN THE EGGS

put them in a brooder hutch and see what happens. TK U MLJ LV NV

WAR PREPARATIONS ARE NEVER COMPLETE

until the flag is either lowered or raised. TK U MLJ LV NV

Small Geography Fix

I know this is way past the original posting but I only recently read this. I enjoyed it very much. If you ever publish this elsewhere I would recommend dropping the last 's' in Salina...Salinas is in California. I confuse them enough as it is.

Thank you for your efforts.
Pete

I'm tired of authors

Writing such dumb, weak women. It's insaulting.

Huh?

Agree with anon below. Role play is great 1v1 but don't change the personas of 6 people.

A virgin also??

Amanda is a millionaire, businesswoman, an ex-Ms Teen America, Olympic champion, sharpshooter, gorgeous, intelligent, confident, capable, generous and selfless, courageous...and a virgin. She can sense how he is feeling and loves him instantly.

He is a millionaire, black belt, ex-marine captain, the hottest man alive, courageous, has ridiculously close connections within the whitehouse, courthouse, CIA, completely monogamous and honest, and sex with him is sooooo wonderful that even the woman who is completely devoted to Foster and has enjoyed adventurous sex with 6 men at a time still enjoyed sex with him more than with any other.

Please. These characters are so far from realistic that they aren't even like able to me anymore. I am not rooting for them as I read since they do 't come across as real people. Maybe shoot for some realism in your next story.

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