Will you write the musical score Tazz.
You're better placed than I am in LV
I'm glad that you enjoyed the poem Annette. Thank you for your comments
Your short but delightful poem tells the entire story and all the important points are there for all to appreciate. Thank you.
this could be a rock opera. TK U MLJ LV NV
Love the poem, very well constructed and thoughtful, truly sensual. xoxoxo Annette
Part of the pleaure of this poem for me at least was in the short lines that seemed like a throbbing tempo. Like Piscator, I may have more to write about this when I have the time to read it agsin.
This works well - I'll have to come back to figure out why.
You think the plums are shit ball? If there is anyone around here who is a shit eater it must be you - go back to green mountain where shit keeps the country green.
I love it!
it's "you" not "your"
A girlfriend always offers a welcomed hand-deserves 5
Isn't that what Literotica stands for ? Well I'm ignoring the Literary aspect and giving this poem a 5 for Eroticism.
Too true - but then the cycle renews
puts rappers to shame, TK U MLJ LV NV
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