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What luck

Some guy has to have been chosen by you!!

I BELIEVE THE TITLE SHOULD HAVE BEEN

"Layers" and then check the nest, TK U MLJ LV NV

great start!

I like it! A great start for you first submission to Literotica. Love them redheads. Do keep going!

Not one for knowing much about Greek mythology, I had to brush up on Persephone, sb. Once I did that, things fell into place. Nicely done.

Unfortunately

Modern poets sadly forget the importance of rhythm in poems and only focus on rhyme. This is just another of those.

I wish I were again a maid
To feel my lover swift invade
My virgin mouth and pouting lips
Between my eager wide-spread hips
But every night I cry, 'Alas!'
To feel him not within my ass...

Thanks for reading & commenting!

Maybe

You might benefit from reading poetry as well as writing it. You might get some ideas about structure, rhythm and conventions there.

Good

Made my sub feel lucky for what he's got

Made me hard

Lovely, literate imagery. Intelligent and sexy sonnet.

hey ass south

one a day, like a vitamin is enough for us to read

BEDS ARE ALSO FOR SLEEPING

however a preamble is always nice TK U MLJ LV NV

Vivid imagery. Very good poem.

INSATIABLE COUPLED WITH CONSUAL

creates long and loving partnerships/ TK U MLJ LV NV

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Hard cocks are always my goal!

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