You fine filligreed sexual tyrannosaurus
How the hell are ya?
The lament is well balanced between the ramming of spadge, melacholly with a happy ending, could be the new rub and tug menu!
I 5-ed !
The iambic pentameter goes off the rails on this line:
"And mold yourself in the fashion he'd wish; "
You might put it back on the rails with:
"And mold yourself in just the way he'd wish;"
...or something along those lines.
You're one of the poets I always make sure I read in New Poems.
You're more meticulous about rhyme and meter than I am, S.O. I would have written "...he wishes/" starting the next line using a trochee, thus maintaining the rhyme and meter for the ear, if not the eye. Somehow "he'd wish" didn't sound right to me.
Nonetheless, a great read as usual.
This is a crackling, sizzling poem.
and their rock opera song from Tommy. TK U MLJ LV NV
This is very wow, I have never read erotic poetry. So for my first one its very good and quite interesting. Thank you for suggesting I read it.
Could not agree more with GP's assessment. I might cap Sun, but maybe that's just my preference showing. 😃
......and lovely. Like a slow burn, it starts dryly then burns white hot with a final clincher in the last line.
Thank you for the comment. I am not sure what the other sites are :)
I can reach you,
I can touch you,
Push so much,
Bur never rush you,
Push me back,
The push and pull,
Will fill me up,
Until I'm full,
I'll fill you back,
I'll touch you right,
In ways you thought,
You never might,
Be touched and in,
Some secret part,
I'll touch you and then,
Have your heart,
But only when,
I have your soul,
Entwined with mine
Will we be whole,
It's in the cards,
And on the pages,
As if it's been,
That way for ages.
who caused Blue wet dreams in the teens, TK U MLJ LV NV
you seem most at home with sex scenes
in her torch songs. TK U MLJ LV NV
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