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Loved it!

What a fun, teasing story! Can't wait for the next chapter of adventures!

Wow!

Great story can’t wait for part 2!

nice!

Looking forward to hearing the comments on the pictures that were posted in the next chapter!

gender issues

Great story first of all! Caught a couple of places where Ali became "him". Those minor errors distract from the flow of the story.....

Open and swapping, even select sharing, I get

Turning your wife into a wanton slut I really don't get why someone would want to do this. Still, this was very titillating and a very good 1st entry.

Welcome to Literotica

Very nice 1st entry and the openings to what promises to be an interesting series.
Looking forward to new chapters (gets the whip out) especially dinner with the parents to see if he measures up to their standards ;)
Yes, a few odds n sods to tighten up, nothing a proofread wouldn't help.
Excellent start though.

A very good story

Kudos for living out a fantasy, and especially for having a hubby who would allow you to. I like the detail you gave the whole experience. I am curious as to what you saw in those first two videos. Speaking of which, is it feasible that you could share that video with the Literotica community? If not, then how about just me? I'd love to see you dance.

In summary

the story of a husband that fails to protect his wife from stupidity and allows others to control his marrige.
Stupidity starts with agreeing to her not finishing her degree, get that, then try modelling, it's in the bag then in case the modeling doesn't work.
Stupidity not querying that state she was in and specifically not noticing the mess that was her nostrils. Compounding all that by having a bottle by the bed.
Allowing others to control, I got the impression the boobs were agreed and paid for by the husband and wife so fuck the agent, get a new one, it's his 10% to lose. If she doesn't agree refuse to allow the op or payment...while you are married. Soon find out her priorities.
How long before the 'only work available' is erotic, then soft core, then hard core?
Oh well at least there's no kids involved.
Overall not too bad especially for an early attempt. I've commented like this on the 1st episode of what become some of my favourite stories, it's because I see potential. I'll keep an eye on the car crash to see just how slow motion it is.
Please get an editor there are some areas that if tidied up, would make it so much easier to read.

Nerding out!

Being a former competitive runner... what would happen if it rained during her half-marathon? Runners don't stop just cause it's raining.

Get your terminology straight

The general premise is fine, but get your railroad terminology right. Engineers do not "drive" trains, since trains do not have a "steering wheel". You should perhaps either stick to a transportation mode that you understand, or else do a little background work to make the story more believable.

More chapters

I have numerous ideas for adventures that Joe and his friends can experience. Let me know if you would like to read about Joe's further exploits.

An amazing story I would love to experience

This story was amazing. I can only dream of having the opportunity to experience public display such as this.

Thanks for your opinion but you're missing a key component. People usually offer criticism for selfish reasons. It's not to see a better story down the road or to encourage a writer who has now posted... 3 things.

As right as you are about dealing with comments or about how a person handles criticism... that sometimes comes with time. Your opinion wasn't invalid but don't think you're also not hurling tomatoes at a rookie actor. You might as well have said, "This stupid. You suck. Get balls." The same heart is behind it. I find people who respond anonymously in order to believe they are some sort of art/writing elite lacks compassion and is selfish in nature. This is me telling you to put on some adult clothes and grow up. Go read the other stories you enjoy so much. I hope in the future you have more empathy for people who are stepping out into the unknown.

I just started writing this type of stuff maybe 3 months ago.
If I post anymore stories, I will do so without a comment section.
That's my mistake.

Once again, for those who offered encouragement with your criticism, I thank you.

Sincerely Yours,
Dignified Whiny Brat

Best one

Each to their own but for me this was the best of the 5. Keep writing you have a talent x

This requires a prequel, and a follow-up.

I'm intrigued. The dynamic in the house sounds like it has enough for a story by itself, and clearly there is impetus for more to happen after this scenario. Let's see more!

Also, I don't know what the others are talking about, but I found 50x and 60x binoculars on Amazon without so much as a simple search, so clearly they're not trying very hard. I have a pair of 50s in my truck now.

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