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Enjoyed your story

Looking for more. I liked the mention of condoms. It brings more reality to the story. Keep writing looking for more stories.

nooooo

Please make it so that julia isn't pregnant.. And that catherine and james are still together. not a threesome

Hypnosos

Hypnosis can be dangerous to the weak minded. One should try to listen in little chunks before submitting to the full track of the recording, to be on the safe side. You never know what subliminal messages may get embedded into your mind.

Rosebud

...You keep using that word. I don't think it means what you think it means.

From the way you use it, you apparently think that it refers to the vagina.

Actually, it refers to the anus (the butthole).

-Rei

Gotta use protection...

or you're gonna make babies. That's the way it's been for thousands of years.

Reminds me of an old joke; Question: What do you call a man and a woman who don't use protection? Answer: Parents.

Great story, by the way. Oh to be that young again!

Thanks for all the comments everyone

Really appreciate all the wonderful comments - thank you every one of you. It means a lot to me that you took that time to let me know what you thought of my little story.

Silly little scene, as usual, but an enjoyable read during my coffee break

Thanks for the input

Thank you for the input. For me personally I enjoy shorter erotic stories and it is my intent to keep all of my writing to under three pages as posted on Literotica. When I read erotic stories that are greater than three pages I've usually lost interest halfway through. Thus I focus on striking a balance between the length as well as the descriptive content of the piece. Many seem to enjoy the "locker room retelling of a conquest" style. However, as I am constantly looking to improve my writing and to appeal to as many readers as possible, I will certainly take into consideration your opinion. Again, thank you very much for taking the time to read my writing as well as then going the extra mile to make comment. No doubt your input will help my future works be more erotic for all readers, which after all is my intent!

Oh to be that age again

You've brought back some good memories. When you're 18, horny, and have a willing girlfriend, rainy days are good for spending afternoons indoors getting to know one another better.

Great story, by the way.

Don't they do it upside down in Australia?

When a lovely young woman asks if you'd like to sleep with her, the standard answer has to be, "Fuck yes!"

I thoroughly enjoyed your first time story.

Thanks everyone for all the comments

Just wanted to say I really appreciate your comments and feedback. Thanks a million all of you.

Tell the story, don’t just give a play-by-play

It reads like a locker room retelling of a conquest. It’s rushed. You need to describe more and tell less.

EDIT

DECENT STORY, BUT YOU NEED SOME SERIOUS EDITING!

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