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The title of this poem's a tease
I thought it would show DK's ease
At fucking her lover
And then going again for another
Orgasm, but alas! There's no sleaze.
🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟
So I read it again. It's quite hot
In fact, I like it a lot
Sex is a god-given gift
Which gives humans a lift
If you choose to fuck aliens (or not).
Ana - I do love your poetry, and it is one of the first things I check for (and hope for) each time I come to Literotica. As in your poem, I will miss you as we part ways.
I enjoyed this one a lot and can be sexual putting us on border between heaven and earth during ecstasy, or it can be just spiritual. Plus you used the word "proton" ;)
Change your past tense (led) to present tense in your 4th line. That's a continued sentence with changing tenses.
Otherwise, this piece is absolutely perfect and certainly one of your best efforts. Repetition is a key poetic element here. I'm impressed how you use it, and I like following your focus... your poetic mind's eye. You take me somewhere, and I like to travel.
Latest 15 Reader Comments
The title of this poem's a tease
I thought it would show DK's ease
At fucking her lover
And then going again for another
Orgasm, but alas! There's no sleaze.
🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟
So I read it again. It's quite hot
In fact, I like it a lot
Sex is a god-given gift
Which gives humans a lift
If you choose to fuck aliens (or not).
Ana - I do love your poetry, and it is one of the first things I check for (and hope for) each time I come to Literotica. As in your poem, I will miss you as we part ways.
Heart wrenching and beautifully poignant Katie xxx
Sweet
Ten, nine, eight,
seven, six, five, four
Love it! Best intro to a poem ever.
😢 I love everything about your poetry, I felt as though I was there, watching this unfold. It broke my heart. thank you for sharing x
Never quite got that far myself. But, wow.
I enjoyed this one a lot and can be sexual putting us on border between heaven and earth during ecstasy, or it can be just spiritual. Plus you used the word "proton" ;)
Thank you Pixie. A difficult one to write x
Very deep & thought provoking...I love this.
WOW!! Wonderfully beautiful.
I was enraptured by this. Absolutely magnificent.
I know these feelings only too well. I've had them ALL my life.
Change your past tense (led) to present tense in your 4th line. That's a continued sentence with changing tenses.
Otherwise, this piece is absolutely perfect and certainly one of your best efforts. Repetition is a key poetic element here. I'm impressed how you use it, and I like following your focus... your poetic mind's eye. You take me somewhere, and I like to travel.
This made me cry. I couldn't read it all. It was too painful for me.