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Your entire Poem consists of 2 sentences broken up into 5 verses : Wonderful !

Please give us a Poem on the earthquake in Nepal from the point of view of a climber on Mount Everest as the onrushing avalanche takes his life ........

Dem , this is a Hindu Boy-Muslim Girl inter-religious couple where the girl is

also older & taller than the boy [ both are highly educated , highly paid MBAs ] : they fought against the Elders of both families & both communities to get married .
Arpit Roy is an amateur Poet too & this is his take on his own love affair & marriage !
thank you for your encouraging comments
regards
---ash9

Runs along nicely

And fortunately life twists and turns back on itself eventually

Very nice

Kudos for your couple - Good for a broad smile!

Nice

And and unexpected image

@ Jwren

Maybe I should...
...work in education or...
...a Chinese Takeaway ;-)

@JWren

Thank you for your positive comments, they mean a lot to me :-)

Very nice!

I love this line, the image it evokes: "somewhere there is an origami elephant graveyard." And the closing line can be taken in a number of ways - some more wistful than others. I'm so glad gm poem flagged your poem - I'll come back to it, it deserves savoring, thinking about and coming back to.

Fun

All on earth have their uses. Fun (and educational!)

The way it should be

Not pleading or even asking but telling. The way to go, Honey - demand respect and only then will he be worthy of your eternal love.
"Hug me tight
Till I'm old and worn."
Great lines in a standout piece.

Very good

I enjoyed your poem. The style was interesting. Painful situation.

Nicely done -

A good picture and well written!

I really liked the form on this, chopped like meat, served in little morsels. Like life. We only get a taste at a time.

A philosophical piece with an everywoman touch, with enough self-awareness not to let the gravitas outweigh the intimacy. Nicely constructed.

A moment, a time, a spirit captured, shining in the evening's sunset.

Well done

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