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Wow! ravenmx, _ You're Poetry Is Beautiful.

With your writing you have touched an emotional part of the Gay Kat, few have ever seen.

I have read so much trash here at literotica.com, it would be an absolute shame if you have totally stopped writing.

Definitely 5 stars, I just wish I could give you more!!!

Thank you for sharing your beautiful poetry with us...

Gay Kat

Another wonderful write

It is not just your writing style but also your choice of subject matter and philosophy that I am enjoying in a number of your poems 5ed

Right ye are Honey

Fo sure there be some melon cauliflower'd ness going on. Which be why kiddo's cribbed word worked so well as a title.
Thank ye for petting my ego Honeygirl

very provocative...

...but not in the way one typically expects around here. Very poetically provocative.

Your jewels still shine bright...

...and if other can't see what l see, then maybe, they are just blinded by the light.
l also see a little melon n cauli here? and l don't mean food porn
Lubberly writing Trix

Sorry Harry , have been cursorily glancing @ this deep , insightful Poem.....

Promising to spend time on it to savour slowly all the nuances of a Writer's mind / experience you have skillfully highlighted but till date have not done justice to your Poem : will respectfully read it , appreciate it & then give a fitting comment commensurate with your effort --- your bro Ash

It's my daughter's word

When I was trying to title this piece it popped into my head, though in a different context, and I felt it was fitting.

Mmmmm! As sweet as honey...

...a core of steel, the romantic in me would like to think that their foundations will weather all oncoming storms.

I felt myself...

...been swept along in the air and tumbling through your summer door.
I did enjoyed your poem :-)

Loveaby as opposed to

Lullaby ........great concept !

I really like

this poem. Its unfortunately very true and hits a nerve because of that, in a good way.

I forgot

I meant to add that the title really works well.

I like a poem that makes me work to understand it

but even knowing the place and opera refs still leaves me with a pretty disturbing narrative. I don't know why, exactly, but that doesn't seem to matter.

There's a tension leading to a shocking image--

"should i thank giotto
or merely grovel before you,
subservient as an undertaker freshening
your dead mother's face"

that is echoed in the last line with that disturbing (again) juxtaposition of images.

It's not a comfortable poem.

Lines that cause a physical reaction in a reader is a good thing. (Not to mention the feels, and you induce a whole tumble of emotions across the poem. Ya know, cohesive.) :-)

PS the post it note on the fridge put me in mind of Williams' "Plums."

Melancholy

Beautiful lines twining and twinning with each other. ( sorry, I couldn't resist) It feels like you've cut off gravity, and I'm spinning slowly and out of control into nowhere and everywhere. The last couplet is a wonderful closing.

Fankq Ash...

...I am appley, apeely as smiley as could be now :-D

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