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Great start!

I love Genie storylines!

quite an interesting side story

almost became another world in a few pages. to'vah are like a race or a house, living in the forces of the world. story ends on a dissatisfying note. i wonder why the mother has to die immediately.
excellent work!

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A great build up, but the ending sex scene was really rushed. It would be perfect if you've expanded it, like the sensations of the poor girl, how it was first uncomfortable and painful, how it gradually started to feel pleasurable, etc.

TYPO

have nothign more to add

SHOULD BE

have NOTHING more to add

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After breakfast ,our

SHOULD BE:

After breakfast, our

NOTE: A COMMA IS NEVER PRECEDED BY A SPACE, THE ABOVE IS ONE OF SEVERAL ERRORS OF THIS SORT

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pissed of look

SHOULD BE:

pissed OFF look

Jarko peeled of his cloths

SHOULD BE

Jarko peeled of his CLOTHES

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he had made several break through and

SHOULD BE:

he had made several break THROUGHS and

One of the best I've read so far

Unrestrained sexual activities are rarely satisfying, which is why I think your story works so well. It may be a challenge however to keep the characters developing sexually. Even so, I'm looking forward to your future chapters!

Great finish

Your idea of Melody being able to do fantasies opens up some cool avenues for stories. With the Defender I can tell you play or have played SWTOR, nice touch. Also nice finish back in the "real world". Considering Melody's powers I'm surprised you didn't write in a scene with Princess Leia in her prime LOL. Enjoying the series so far.

Part 5?

This is the most amazing story ever. Is there going to be a part five in the making? I would read it a million times. Something where her boobs get stuck at this size or increase some more or they dabble with bondage a little bit. Thanks. You are my favourite writer on here

Wowzer

This is going to take a bit of work, eh? Everything so far Has been a bit too easy on them, yes? cqtm

Next installment's going to be very interesting I'd wager... if I wagered, which I don't.

Very enjoyable story

Thanks for sharing and looking forward to your next chapter

I am curious , about whether you would continue The Coward and the Wolf.
Thx for writing

Yummy!

This demon sex story was hot as hell!

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