The mermaid was great idea, would never have thought of it. It would be such a perfect turn-on to placed such a way while cruising across the water.
Three cheers for inventiveness.
I was enjoying the story until she told her husband that Rick wanted her to leave / divorce Teddy and marry him and have his children.....To me, that is a heart ripper. a destroyer of his very inner self. She build him up only to destroy him.. Teddy wants nothing for his wife Sarah but the best....Even if it tear's him apart. Is he okay with this? He may say he is but deep down he's feeling the betrayal. the humiliation and losing the love of his life. If I were to write and ending to this story, They'd remain a very happy couple.
(Same anon as before) Don't get me wrong, I think you're a good writer and I enjoyed this story for the most part. I'm not in this category by mistake, it's one of the ones I read regularly along with BDSM (specifically femdom) and Sci-fi/fantasy. Although, if I were in charge of the site, I'd split Trans and CD into two separate categories. There seems to be a pretty firm line between stories that appeal to me and ones that don't, with only a few that leave me confused as to whether they were written for my demographic or not.
As for this one, the tagline indicated that it would appeal to me, and for the most part, it did! I'm just saying that I find it quite jarring and immersion-breaking for the MC to be thinking "I'm so gay" while engaged in an activity I don't think of as particularly gay. It would be like him thinking "I'm such a vegetarian" while eating a pepperoni pizza. Maybe you say the meat is just a topping, and pizza is a vegetarian food at its core, but I still don't think a vegetarian would eat it.
Honestly, I wouldn't mind a spinoff story focusing on Michelle Lawrence and her exploits. Maybe she'd end up moonlighting as a Private Detective with Linda and Rita as her assistants.
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OMG!!! I love this story and each chapter doesn’t disappoint. It’s so hot and erotic.
The mermaid was great idea, would never have thought of it. It would be such a perfect turn-on to placed such a way while cruising across the water.
Three cheers for inventiveness.
I was enjoying the story until she told her husband that Rick wanted her to leave / divorce Teddy and marry him and have his children.....To me, that is a heart ripper. a destroyer of his very inner self. She build him up only to destroy him.. Teddy wants nothing for his wife Sarah but the best....Even if it tear's him apart. Is he okay with this? He may say he is but deep down he's feeling the betrayal. the humiliation and losing the love of his life. If I were to write and ending to this story, They'd remain a very happy couple.
(Same anon as before) Don't get me wrong, I think you're a good writer and I enjoyed this story for the most part. I'm not in this category by mistake, it's one of the ones I read regularly along with BDSM (specifically femdom) and Sci-fi/fantasy. Although, if I were in charge of the site, I'd split Trans and CD into two separate categories. There seems to be a pretty firm line between stories that appeal to me and ones that don't, with only a few that leave me confused as to whether they were written for my demographic or not.
As for this one, the tagline indicated that it would appeal to me, and for the most part, it did! I'm just saying that I find it quite jarring and immersion-breaking for the MC to be thinking "I'm so gay" while engaged in an activity I don't think of as particularly gay. It would be like him thinking "I'm such a vegetarian" while eating a pepperoni pizza. Maybe you say the meat is just a topping, and pizza is a vegetarian food at its core, but I still don't think a vegetarian would eat it.
AHHH soso good lovely cant wait for the rest :3
I love this story and want to read more.
Nice story that got me so hard. A bit of a sad ending but still a hot story.
Honestly, I wouldn't mind a spinoff story focusing on Michelle Lawrence and her exploits. Maybe she'd end up moonlighting as a Private Detective with Linda and Rita as her assistants.
Come on Author, what’s going on with this story? Can you at least give us an update?
Let Demarcus make her a woman
Love the prison Dmitry has found himself in. Think both slaves will find themselves back at the nanite clinic before they leave the island.
I didn't get past "I always thought me and my wife..."
Wtf was that ending.. such a letdown
Love the development with Emily. Hope you give us many more chapters! 5/5
You’re killing me! Great story, I just wish it was longer!