Group Sex Comments

Load newRequesting new commentsRequesting new commentsNo new comments, try later

Latest 15 Reader Comments

Horny, lusty

Nice they both wanted it, and he wanted it for her. Somewhat abandoned in her actions, that kept going on and on. I imagine you r a couple writing together...as practice for the big moment?

awkward !

Writing in the first person (I), but mixed with second person (you) voice is a demanding choice for any writer AND much moreso for readers. You have not (yet) mastered this style -- this story is a crazy mashup of narrative postures competing for ownership of nearly every sentence, & thus of our experience of who does what to whom. For most (99.999%) readers, the standard third person is much more familiar and despite the alleged distance it imposes on the reader, third person (he/she/it/they) makes it far easier for us to just enjoy the story & absorb the flow of the writer's content. Look at how the better writers here write. I bet you cannot find any example of a first or second-person-voice story that compares to the best on Literotica -- take the hint, emulate your betters. Experiment, sure, until you have something that really works. If someone told you this effort is fucking fantastic, you were misled.

Good writing

Multiescapade stories are my favorite. Allows more character and relationship developments. Looks great so far!

This is the most well written story. Fantastic!!

Amazing writing. Kept my rapt attention. I couldn't stop reading. The author did a fantastic job. I love good erotica.

stone cold

This didn't get sick at the end , it was at the beginning, and just got worse.

Warning

IMHO...The warning about this NOT being a stand-alone needs to be clearer.

re: Continued?

You don't know whether or not to continue your own story? Really?

Oh, and ditch the 2nd person. It sucks.

Gay cowboy

I like the riding scene: Mark "had Stewart sitting on him and riding him up and down".

Awsome

I found this story to be awesome. I hope to find out what happened next and also what happened between your UK Adventure and your Naughty Night Out.

Awesome Story!

That was an awesome story. I cried when Nanny finally accepted Colt and became the mom he never had. So sweet.

Good story

Hi, I'm a bi woman and I also like to play with bi men. This story really turned me on and I had a great, LOUD orgasm while reading it. Nothing like camping sex, sex in the outdoors, and sex between both men.and women. I kind of wished that Trevor was verse and that he could convince the narrator (forgot his name) to have his first experience being ass-fucked by another man. That was the only thing missing from the story for me.

1*

usual shit from another WHORE "author".

I will suggest

That since 40 of us Favourited this story, there is your answer... Keep on writing...

Fantastic!!

Annnnnd I'm hooked!!
This story was fantastic. I hope this becomes a series.

I loved the style of writing, Switching from the different perspectives gave the story great depth. The sexscenes were hot and your characters felt genuine and very real.
Can't wait to see where this goes and how it all rolls out.

Forgot your password?

Please wait

Change picture

Your current user avatar, all sizes:

Default size User Picture  Medium size User Picture  Small size User Picture  Tiny size User Picture

You have a new user avatar waiting for moderation.

Select new user avatar:

   Cancel