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Reality

I believe that the author should be allowed to post real incidences or even fiction. And no one should have a problem with anything that is posted here specially if it's something that happens for real.

Good to know she's a bitch

BEFORE he married the cunt. Ugly story of betrayal and abuse.

Chapter 3-4 WRECKED IT

Yes you are a good writer and story teller. BUT you can screw up, and in my opinion surely did! Chap's 1 & 2 were up to par for your normally good stuff. Then you evidently ate some bad stuff and went way off the tracks! Small fact...I DID NOT waste my time reading all of 3 & 4. Life is too short, and there is so much good stuff out there to read, I don't waste my time reading junk. Your last chapters were junk.

Haters

Well there are some haters out there who feel Rohan is a pervert and the slut is a holy virgin and threaten him. So I don't think he would be writing anymore.

Would love to try this

I must admit to fantasizing this happening to me. Excellent

Good read

Excellent story well written

Nice start

I certainly appreciated this effort, thank you. It might be nice to have a follow up chapter. I bet they would follow instructions the next time. I would say take most anonymous comments with a grain of salt. If they can’t even log in and be accountable for their statements, why listen to them? Looking forward to what you have next.

What a slut !!!

What a slut she is dude. Eagerly waiting for your next story, on how she gets destroyed and reading about her I'm sure she enjoys the golden shower.

Doctor "who?" Indeed

10 was portrayed by David Tennant, not Michael Tennet (whoever that is).

Rare?

Is it rare for a woman to have an orgasm from penetration alone? If so, maybe I should play the lottery. ;)

Excellent

Which all stories whent like this. My fantasy

Nice Start!

Fine narrative, good start, with a possible sequel. Michael & Rachel's outing was quite erotic and arousing, and the narrative seemed plausible and enjoyable. The flow was good, but some grammar errors did distract my reading. Offenders were a few misspellings or typos, verb tense, homonym switch, punctuation, multiple misplacement of commas, and a few run-on sentences. Still, the writing was much better than many stories on Literotica, so I do thank you for your contribution and hope that you will continue to offer good arousing stories.

mmmm please do

id love to be daddy's little slut taking his and his friends loads in all my holes

An initial suggestion

There is potential here, but you most definitely need an editor. I'm not sure if the same person wrote the whole story, but there are some indications that the beginning and end were not done by the same writer.
There are a number of editors here on the site who will be quite willing and able to help you develop your writing and your style, so why not shop around to find one you can work well with?
Good luck and keep working at it.

Another Great Chapter

Keep them coming. I hope the snooty French ladies get generous samples of the fine American stud.

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