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Neon , you're supposed to react ......laugh , snicker .....cry ......but since this 'got' you...

You're neuroses is unconsciously / subconsciously attached / attracted to Marquis de .sade et Baron Leopold vonn Sacher- Masoch or BDSM !!! Welcone to the club Boss ! Or Kindly walk into my parlour ---
BDSM spider to Vanilla fly !?!


with more details and explanations, TK U MLJ LV NV

That illustration....

cracks me up! I don't know if I was supposed to, but I did snicker.

I liked how you massaged this in PF&D, AH and am enjoying reading this again. It effectively builds towards a crescendo in the 2nd stanza.

I may have missed it in an earlier version, but I think "things" in the first line weakens it. If you can find an image word, it would be better. "Things" is too general. Even if you substituted "lust" in line 4 and inserted "it" where "lust" was, it would be an improvement IMO.

That said, it was an enjoyable read with or without the recommended change or, for that matter, with or without the illustration.

You're growing on me.....

....or your poetry is. This tickled me, made me smile. Thanks Ash.

Lit mixed up

Illustrashuns : my pic of the Red Cheeked Muse was different : this pic was for an illustrated Story submission !


too far and can ever.What??TK U MLJ LV NV

Wowwww, Mer !!!!

this is a hell of a beautiful Poem esp. the Killer lines :--
Fate plays us like a hula-hoop
round her waist , hips gyratin' , laughin'
until , exhausted , she will let the hoops fall.

Fave-ed'n Five-ed !!!

we were there

together after your poem and art, oh yes!!!! she was thrilling

oh God yes

strip and whip them both -- great art!

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