Non-Erotic Poetry117x3Blue bee wearing a sparkly purple headband
scrunchy reclamation
digression, ahem
In from the sun, scorched n sweating
neck caped mane dripping, fan on
he sits before his vanity, fusses with his hair
combs it with the scissors,
swept back behind the ear
new claws it on the side then twists the dividend
barrette on top, grins, sighs, reads
I'm still walking around the house
astral binocular sight engaged
ghost skin aching for fingers
reaching to the eastern slopes
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Thank you Harry
Thank you very much for taking the time to explain that. It was extremely helpful.
I had somewhat stupidly thought that the 117*3 was the power of the binoculars. OK, I do not use binoculars.
I think that as with music, there are different styles or even approaches to poetry. All valid to those who appreciate them. I greatly appreciate that insight into your verse.more...
funny
I thought it was a rather odd lumber size. Here is a present (.), a period, use it sparingly.
Harry Hill , loooong time no see & gr-8 to see U back on NP !!!
After your crystallizin' Xplana-shun to Clearday everything is fully appreciated ( Defendin' Champs Espania & Australia just got knocked outta' Brazinga'14 ) & i 5-ed
---- your bro A-9
For Cleardaynow: nothing i write is extremely good in my opinion
Three poems in one submission #117
the blue bee is a beanie baby sent to me as a gift and residing on my desk, the headband a scrunchy that held my braided hair on a long trip home
digression, fucking around instead of writing
the second is just a moment in time after coming in the house from working in the garden and putting my hair up in a bun to cool off. if I said, combed my hair with a pencil, would it make more sense? Just trying to describe the moment and playing with sounds rhythms
the third was a reply to another poem in writing live saying how much I missed my love
hope that helpsmore...
Please someone, what does this mean?
I have absolutely no idea what this poem means or is saying. I suspect that I am not alone among the readers here.
Obviously not only Harry but several others have clear ideas on it and consider it extremely good.
This is as far as I can get:
• There is a bee or a wasp in the first verse (could be the sweaty man in the next verse) & something about a digression
• Second verse has a sunburnt and sweaty guy preening himself & using scissors (to trim?)
• Third verse has a different or the same guy walking around the house longing for something & having metaphorical binoculars.
Now there are poems that I understand (to at least some extent) and like, mostly clear but some (eg SusanSnow) with some degree of obscurity. Then there are others where I am pretty sure of what the writer is doing & I don’t rate the poem. Then there are poems where I do not understand them at all. This is one of the third kind. It is clear that both Harry and his admirers are intelligent and well read. So please, this is a genuine request and not some kind of back handed put down.
So. Please someone.more...
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