Breathed like a secret in each other's ear,
peeking together beneath the cover.
There is a penis and a pussy here.
And then frolics upon the chandelier
of each other, and the tickles and slurs
breathed like a secret in each other's ear
are Heorot fires when Grendel leers.
A double-take, and again discover
there is a penis and a pussy here
and the compulsory that they cohere.
Position, velocity, and angular,
breathed like a secret in each other's ear.
The flesh is ridden, but never steered.
The fish will wiggle as the sea prefers.
There is a penis and a pussy here
last we checked beneath our fur. But we're
wise to check again, and again concur,
breathed like a secret in each other's ear,
there is a penis and a pussy here.
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Enjoyed it muchly!
I like the contrast between the playfulness, near-schoolgirl ditty, and the carnality - beautifully woven together in the villanelle form. It was recommended in the PF&D thread - thanks, AH, for pointing us here, to enjoy the penis and the pussy.more...
I do love a villanelle.
Use this as a template, "The penis and the pussy
set off in a pea green boat"....try for something lighter, your poem is too dense
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