- Non-Erotic Poetry
- About a poem that sucks
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left it spoiled rotten
written on a roll of click clack receipt paper
a poem - sort of
ungraceful bic stain blue scribble
not quite worth the oxygen and carbs
spoiled in burning fuel to tension
and making that writing motion
immediately - a sour taste
stuck to my fingertips
so impossible to resist
the impulse nagged
and I raised them to my tongue
to taste the dissonance of words
gone embarrassingly wrong
telling all - showing nothing
brown nosing every dead end rhyme
caressing every passe cliché
spilling out a mockery of soul
not me - not you - not real
still I couldn't help but feel
that yes I did I wrote I tried
it's not my fault
not entirely my blame
and since I gave it a shot
no real shame
that the poem died
hello sucky poem,
thanks for letting me write
read and be repulsed
impeccability is for the immortal
and so bloody boring
anyway
- COMMENTS
duddle146over 17 years agoA talented poet ~ while she metaphorically beats herself about the head for lack of creative ability ~ she writes something so enjoyable. We should all be so lucky!
LeBrozover 17 years agoAnd then again perhaps it weren't the words
But the medium used to write on ~ register tape
Bit of a limiting factor to begin with.
tungtied2ualmost 20 years agosucky poem! None of my sucky poems are nearly as good as this. None of my good poems are as good as this. Can I have your trash?
twelveoonealmost 20 years ago...should be required reading.
saw myself, first thing I stopped doing is:
"brown nosing every dead end rhyme"
great line, almost, just almost, if I had the time
Oh crap!
dcpoet44almost 20 years agoi really enjoyed this. this theme is always fun to work with. i only have one suggestion. take it or leave it. but in this line:
"that yes I did I wrote I tried"
possibly commas after yes, did, wrote, tried,
or in the manner you have some of your lines set up
that yes (space) i did (space) i wrote (space) i tried.
that is all i saw. nice job.
