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your image evolves like a swirling oil screen
prismatic amoeba slide from my fingers,
flickered lights flash shadowed branches
from here, no
there!

Once I think I've caught you
the projector clicks into high speed
and burns infrared across my belly
fingers melt as they trace your heat--

finally I see you
in the pooled reflection
right as you sip me down.

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flyguy69flyguy69over 19 years ago
Gulp!

tasty poem, seattle! I love the amorphous structure and language-- works well for this poem.

puck444puck444over 19 years ago
NIce work

However. I have read many of your works, just never commented. I know your style, your intent, or I like to think I do. This section-

your image evolves like a swirling oil screen

prismatic amoeba slide from my fingers,

flickered lights flash shadowed branches

from here, no

there!

how about--

your image evolves, a swirling sheen

prismatic amoeba slide from fingers,

flickered lights flash

shadowed branches from here, no!

there

-

sheen implies oily, "my" is understood. Very nice work, and I love your imagination. Keep it up-

My Erotic TailMy Erotic Tailover 19 years ago
new poem review

Your poem was mentioned on the thread

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Merry Christmas~

My Erotic TailMy Erotic Tailover 19 years ago
new poem review

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http://www.literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?s=&postid=10840885#post10840885

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