- Erotic Poetry
- And if not love
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soft touching, slow
tantalising circles
fingers, lips
seeking, finding
warm moist flesh,
breathing, tasting
each other's
essence.
Building now,
faster now,
harder now,
until this frisson
passes.
A sigh, a
final touch,
then gone,
leaving each
alone.
- COMMENTS
legerdemerabout 8 years agoPiscator, I had not seen this before - you've used such a delicate brush to build the mood and make your points delicately. I feel the middle stanza is a bit rushed. Maybe that doesn't need more words (although the right words could add), only a space between the third and fourth lines, giving it a bit of anticipatory syncopation. So to speak. The last two lines of the last stanza leave me a little sad, a denouement.
HoneyAdoredalmost 9 years agoI enjoyed this, from the simplicity of the write to the shape, it all worked for me 5ed
