As if one

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AS IF ONE

There is one individual in this world,
that brings happiness & fullfilment to another one.
With two to become as closely as united,
then to go off separate ways- without.
Even though they may have been separated,
for awhile, yet still together spiritually.
For now deep inside they still carry this feeling,
to care for the other. .
And as time passes by, the longer it goes;
the stronger it may become.
For one person to run from the other,
to try to escape the circumstances of.
May put one in locked period of time,-leaving
the thoughts,memories,images of the other.
For this one-
is lost , in a world of mirrors reflecting the other;
hoping to be found & woken from this dream. . .

Searching for another to replace,
that emptiness inside of one's heart.
Looking for that warm sensation,
that feeling of love- that once was realistic.
To be able to find some one,
with qualities & chareteristics as before.
And then to imagine,not to think of the one,
or to remember as was at- first.
To erase all of memory,
would be taking part of one's life & self.
Would not be able to forget,
the love,the happiness,that special feeling.
To find such person,one would realize:
is lost but -not forgotten.
To find all-
all of those & more,in another person;
for this one,as still in one's thoughts
and in one's dreams. . .

For one to be present & or close,
as of the other.
To feel the sensitivity of the other,
one feels the presense-to be psychic.
To feel the emotional experience,
of the other,without sight or sound.
As one to be sick or under,
for one to feel as other.
To have the clairvoyance,
the power to know of the other.
As one so close to suffer, as death -to ask;
then to think of the other,as a fight to live.
For one-
to perceive the future,places,things,of;
may make one, more attached to the other. . .

To have been bereft,
or as lovelorn.
To become one as if one,
then for one who is so, -so true.
Over the unification, as of the other,
on the personal senses of one.
To sleep or rest at night,
and see the other so true & real.
As said to forget the love of one,
may not forget the one that is true.
As months go by,
time seems to stand a still.
To have one come so close,
will make one stutter in breath.
To have one's heart ,beat- so quick:
to catch that breath,to live again.
For as one-
who has valence,may be left,
in the shadows & mirrors;
reflecting the other. . .

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3 Comments
duddle146duddle146over 17 years ago
affection

Affection between two people can be a wonderful thing ~ if both feel the same.

LeBrozLeBrozover 17 years ago
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I think Jim has got it right; this is way too long. It seems to come out as nonsensical babbling, where so much is said that one is left wondering, "What's the purpose?"

jthserrajthserraabout 20 years ago
Needs some prodigious trimming...

I think if you trimmed out 75% of the poem, you would have something you can work with. Read it outloud and revise until it sounds natural. Cutting back on the elipsis and dashes will give them more emphasis, use only a few.

jim : )

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