- Erotic Poetry
- At My Command
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Click hereAt My command
you obeyed without question,
giving all that you had
to please Me.
At My command
you endured pain,
endured pleasure.
All at my command.
I watched you
obey My orders.
Watched you
reach deep submission
and go beyond the
boundaries of normal orgasm.
I watched you
beg for mercy,
not from pain,
but from pleaure.
I saw you lift
your clamped breasts
into the air and feel
the sting of unyielding pain.
I watched you submit
completely and fully,
become a true slave
and totally yield to your Master's
Demands.
I watched as you knelt and bowed
to Me in thanksgiving
for allowing you to serve me.
When I allowed you to rise,
I felt the pride that only a Master can feel.
My slave,
has obeyed,
has suffered pleasure and pain,
all at My command.
- COMMENTS
LeBrozabout 17 years agoVery nice D/s piece but it struck me that by writing this in present tense, rather than past tense, you could have a more powerful scene:<P>
<Br>At My command
<Br>you obey without question,
<Br>give all that you have
<Br>to please Me.<P>
<Br>At My command
<Br>you endure pain,
<Br>endure pleasure.
<Br>All at my command.<P>
Present tense is the more active voice; play with it in the rest of the piece and see how more powerful the image becomes.
