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Click herecurves, soft,
divot of your hip
there, i press my lips.
my mouth is wet,
anticipating
the taste of you.
i dip
spread your petals
for a hungry lap
of your nectar.
your gasp, arch
orchestrated perfection.
the trick is to return to the original. TK U MLJ LV NV
you've mixed your metaphor moving from flower petals to an orchestral arch. I see... feel the image but I think the overall poem would be that much more powerful if you maintained and supported the single metaphor throughout, building upon the singe image. Either way it is some excellent erotica.
well done,
jth