- Non-Erotic Poetry
- burning liturgy de jure for one
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waiting to happen
self musings like so much
auto eroticism, a schism
this concept is in itself,
a work of art
before i ever put it
into so many words
perspective is subjective
and nothing is original anymore
everything i imagine, has
all been done before
but i'll do it to death
burn down the fucking forest
with a borrowed match
strike that, i'm stricken with
some all consuming inane attraction
knowing it can't be known, to
this extent in which it becomes me
the unbecoming features begin
to glare loudly, and you start to
see me for what i really am
mindsick addict looking abroad
for my antidote, my snake venom answer
bite me again and
cure me with a healing poison
half my mind awakens as
the other half drives off a cliff
and again i know a self separation
almost as awful as my
separation from you.
- COMMENTS
tarablackwood22over 18 years agoBut even the rambling style you choose to write in should have a progression to it, to be effective poetry. Quality rambles, they ramble 'toward' something. This spend much time spinning wheels, going nowhere.
I have read quite a few things by you, but never commented (I don't think). I like your style, your use of hesitation and quick rhyme. In my opinion, you need to have an objective in mind when you write. The talent is obvious, on a line by line level, but your message seems to me to be the same poem after poem. Simply put, you need to say something worth hearing, and when you do, say something else next time. In my opinion, you need to expand your vision...too many reruns.
