but you returned

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ever do the faded leaves
roll, tossed by winter's winds
traversing lawns,
as under darkened skies
crocus gardens shutter closed
and songbirds shriek,

but you returned;
you let me hold your clouds
that swirl and storm,
and as I stretch
my folded wings,
so useless
while you were gone,
I pull you softly close
to hold your tempests calm,
and in the instant
as you find your rest in me,
there comes a peace--
together,
we are
gently strong.

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todski28todski28about 10 years ago
Don't know if you meant this in the non erotic

Or if I am adding my own spin on it, but the undercurrent of eroticism in the language added to the read, the assonance in this is also a highlight, well done!

greenmountaineergreenmountaineerabout 10 years ago

This is nicely done; a little risky IMO with the inverted syntax right out of the gate. I thought I was going to read a throw back Victorian poem with ruffles, flourishes, and excessive language, but that wasn't the case.

"You let me hold your clouds/that swirl and storm" I thought was the focal point around which everything revolved. Coming as it did in the middle of the poem allowed for a nice build up followed by resolution.